Just A Short Piece I'm Going To Write Its Parallel.. Death In A Few Days

I Don’t Know The Official Moment I Came Into This Existence
Taught At A Young Age To Keep At Life With A Persistence
Aint No Distance That Is To Far-off For Me To Catch Up Too
Life Is Entirely Based On The Choices That Are Made By You
How I Was Brought Up Taught To Choose Your Own Decision
A Peaceful Word Is What I Envision, But First We Need A Revision
World Division Caused By Class Imprisonment Of Each Other
We’re All Brothers So Love Is What I Think To Smother
Teach Each Other That Life Is Precious Don’t Test This
Peace Exists… A Choice Faced By Anyone That Reads This
Brought Together To Realize Our Mistreatment Of One Another
Look To The Truest Soul Ever Who Was Born To The Virgin Mother
Died For Our Sins Of One Another Shed Blood For Each Other
Raised As A Fighter So This Cause Will Remain Struggling On
So Don’t Mourn Let Our Existence Be Reborn And Fight On
We Survive By The Image Of God So That Is How We Strive
There’s Much Pain Felt Throughout So I Just Thank God I’m Alive

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sick rythm, overall ill, i'll wait a while before i battle you. Ha

good drop, flow could have been just a little better but other then that the vocab was ill and it was a nice read. Keep droppin adn elevating I like your style

That was deep. It was rather unique and it had a message. It had a nice flow to it and the vocab is right on. Good drop.

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What the fuck is this?

the lines themselves were overall pretty tight....

but i personally hate all this esoteric bullshit that some spew on this site...

if you could make this more meaningful...without burning a hole in a thesaurus then i would be really impressed...

{Peace}

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flow was iight could be better nice piece tho def feelin it

.: Uppin :.

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aight...
your flow was good, it stayed at a good pace and it was easily read.
your vocab was perhaps the best I've seen on this site... damn good kid,
wordplay- your wordplay wasnt in this one, but like others before me said, its not needed in a peice like this...
and your topic, I like this topic, its deep and it lets out emotion...
I kinda like it when people drop something with a hidden meaning, I'm into poetry and stuff like that...
overall this was a very nice drop... I like your style.
thanks for the feed on my drop,
A.T.

Kay Uppin For Some More Feedback

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