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syaing goodbye pt 1
IP: C1DA C961
It's me against the world or at least that's how it seem to me/
All that i got these hardtimes combining with my fuckin misery/ Yeah it's a mystery to tell if god can hear me now but if he can can he keep my ass from going down/ Time after time i beg, pray after pray i sin, so tell me what can i do to stop the devil mens/ I Guess i lost left the tears on the battlefield with my heart in the dirt dead with my only friends/ heaven will you welcome me i stand as i await your response/ No answers yet all i hear is people voice on a run/ Out of luck saying goodbye to whoever cares it was the gate of hell down where i dissapear/ |
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Ok you should try to make all your lines about the same length so it looks good and it kinda helps the flow of things...try adding some internals and multies it helps support the flow and make things flow better..some of your stuff didnt rhyme...Run and Dissapear?..but yeah keep elavating..you will get better..keep dropping though.
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