Termz then Understatement.

What if life was opposite?
Genius received zero aknowledgement
A world with no apocalypse
Lie's were sworn true, zero honest shit
Or Maybe
bodys'd be collaged, eyes out the sockets
the rich ran empty,and the poor had filled pockets
And
religion wasn't tectonic, it had contained no concept
No crosses or lockets,no good word, mute prophets
Perhaps
the blind would be able to see, and the def to hear
But those who would speak to them, voices dissapear
Lives were reversed, you were adults before kids
And you would have to die, before you ever lived

Some Days
The guy inside the mirror is the one that moves
who chats spoofs, and ventilates in phat grooves
So He
He preached to the preacher, and set the rules
Suffering Himself instead of suffering the fools
Left Here
buffering the tools, they use you for their means
the stage chooses you for it's scenes; you've been
practised by the music and ridden by the horse
like midden reinforced,gettin felt by your remorse
Just Know
Your Son hasn't yet risen, It's Before the wars
counter-clockwisened, just let time take it course

damn... terms... your structure was off, but I still picked up
your flow... you vocab was decent dawgy and the wordplay was
great... you made me think about that shit dawg...what if the
world was backwards... damn nice spit man... damn nice...

understatement- good flow, I like how you used your vocab...
word play was aight, but the way that verse made me think,
i think that made up for it... once again, a nice drop... just
try to add more content and make your bars longer... nice drop
dawgy.

A.T.

will yall check my drop... "COMPEXITY" much 'preciated if ya would.

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Life isn't a bitch...
she's just sick of being personified -Sage Francis

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Wowy. I thoroughly enjoyed the effort put into the piece to ensure adjacently-flowing parts. . Surprisingly enough, the unique structure led to a unique, yet affective flow - rather than the traditional crappy structure/crappy flow. I've read enough of each of your pieces to decipher between your writing(s), but I honestly couldn't do so in this particular collaboration (at least not without reading the beginning, ). As for quotables, no one line was more powerful than the next; which, in this case, provided a formula for success.

You could've done more with it, could've went further. . But it was worth the read, & I'll look foward to phuture collaborations.

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This piece was something that should go in Memories. Hall Of Fame, call it what you will.

Basically this had me thinking just how incredible a day like this would or could be. And also how everyday a little bit of this does happen.
It would make for a lovely national holiday. But would it be a day when you would be away from work, but since it is opposite day you would be at work?...hmmm...

"No crosses or lockets,no good word, mute prophets
Perhaps
the blind would be able to see, and the def to hear
But those who would speak to them, voices dissapear
Lives were reversed, you were adults before kids
And you would have to die, before you ever lived"

Well I say! Damndiddy damn. Great. Great Great Great.

"practised by the music and ridden by the horse
like midden reinforced,gettin felt by your remorse"

Ohhhh, Ahhhh, Oeeeee, Auuuuu...wow....lol, great part.



Both of you, just great.

Fame of hall.

Nice Shit From Both . . .
Lines Ur So Short But Yet Feeled Wit Great Detail...
Good Flow From Both . . . Excellent Wordplay Nd Imagery..
Feel'n This . . . Could Picture Wut U Were Say'n..
Dope. Stay Up

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