Yo i'm Tellin ya this Real Talk........
What if Handicaps on Earth still Walked.....
Would'nt it be Different Homie.........
Deaf People could Really Listen Homie.......
No Drugs No More Mind~Damage.........
And Deaf could speak Their Mind no More Sign~Langauge........
Wouldn't it be Nicer if we All had the =EQUAL Features.......
All Have the Same Capacity cause we are Jesus Creatures........
But it won't happen i guess shit is Absurd And Out of Proportion.....
Fake friends try to treat you like a Pie and get a Portion............
And Teenage Chickens When 1st nutted on Think Abortion....DAMN
Killin Their Own Love Ones......
Stupid Bitches dunno they killing their Blood Son....
Hobos gettin spare change under freeways to Fill their Drinks~up......
Now Catholic Churches tryin to slide in Faggot Bishops.....
This Life like A Prostitute This~SHIT~SUCKS.......
This Tragic~Fake Rappers who don't bust want you in CaskEts...
Hiding thier real Selves like they wearing MAsKs~SHIt.......
When really want ur money and fame they don't want you in PlasTic........
I'm the reincarnation of MLK thru Lyrics.......
So people who oppose Fear~Dis.......
They just got Blurry Eyes ~they CLEARLESS.......
I'm just trying to get my name out......
Hoes on videos trying to give their brains out.......
I guess i'm Houstons Under~Dogg..........
But when i'm out i'm the next WonDer~Dawg.......

Hollaz Feed Back please

it wouldnt hurt to work on a better rhyming scheme feel me?

but da concept was good and everything else was on point

good drop

could be beter tho

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^^^ i agree with the ryming scheme but content and vocab was good you stayed on ya topic and felt what you were saying keep up the hott shit and keep elevating
~1~

yeh as alredi sed bout the rymin skeem.....
thought it had a alrite flow.....
keep droppin
peace

Yeah..work on the rhyme scheme a little...it flowed pretty well...your vocab was pretty good...your multies were pretty decent i thought...you didnt really get off topic at all...just work on the rhyme scheme..but keep at it..and keep dropping.

and if you could return some feedback..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84048