Radical Minds

[Thugz]
Kids brainwashed, by stupid electric's losin their fukin respect,
music, fallin to a generation,mostly,..dumb, feelins they negclect.
Reflections of stupitidy, thinkin music is all about the beat,
the message inside, for few choosen one, feelin the real heat.
Makes me mad,.if i try to picture the future,drives me insane,
cuz in my eyes,..if it continue like this, noone is close to sane.
Predictions,of self destroyin,fools,wish i could snor em al up in my nose
they say its all bulshit, but even i can predict, .thats its to damn close.
Makes me kinda sad im part of this so called 'new generation, ..
tell'em im jus 18 somthimes made me feel in state of hummiliation.

[hook x3]
If Our Rhymes Were Kept Under Lock And Key...
Would We Still See A Dope, Malicious MC...
Our, Would It Just be Another Drop-out - Hit By Our Debris...

[Rhytmic]
The Whole Planet Can Laugh At Me, Call Me A Pain...
I'm Mentally Unstable, But I'm The Only One Sane...
A Psycoligical Blood Clotted Brain, With A Pounding Vein...
But One More Hit Of Cocaine, Will Derail My 'Train'...
I Still Got All 10 Fingers, But Usually Only One Is Apparent...
With Words Than Can Pierce Your Mind A Lyrical Aberrant...
My Look Is Transparent, Am I Even There, A Misty Stare...
People Can Read These Words In Dispair, Y'all Better Prepare...
Cos I'm Back, A Month Away, Did I GIve You A Scare...
My Style Is Rare, Since I Went, My Minds be lighter Than Air...
Now I Don't Even Swear, Fuckin' Cum Stains, & Fuckin' -
Fucked Up, Motherfucking-ass-raping-some-bitches-Remains...
My Mind Is Tied In Chains, Trapped Like Turkish School Kids..
Rhymes That the Chruch Forbids, Ther Tryin To Keep It Under Lids...
I'm Still A Lyrically Retard, I'm A Right Wing Supporter...
Wonder Who Tried To be Arnolds Exporter, No Wait - "Deporter"...
But No Fear, Don't Shed A tear, Cos The Rhymic Master Is Still Here...
Never Gonna Disappear, I'm Still An Oral Enginneer...

that was a hella interesting open mic, i thought the vocab and wordplay were pretty good, and the content and topic were definetely original, great drop man, keep postin, i was feelin that.

yo if u have the time can u hit this up wit an honest vote?
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84864
itd be much appreciated.

peace.......

This was keystyled in msn , ....

just spittin , ....

Thnx 4 feedback.........

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This was a dope piece.. Both came hella nice

Thugz.. Your flow, imagery, vocab < All was really tight

Ryhtmic.. Your flow was mad nice.. I was feeling it throughout

This collab worked really really well.. Props : )

Preciated..... = )

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uppin'

thought this phat, original piece here,

thugz
your shit flowed nice i just think u need lil more vocab but shits still tight

Rhytmic
shit flowed nice, was feelin your piece

good shit, hope to see more of this

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I can totally relate ta what Thugz said up there...
Kinda feel stupid ta say ya 18...
Well, being 34, I KNOW how stupid I was at 18...
Not saying you are, but I can relate ta how ya feel, man.
You just have more insight inta yaself that I did at your age.
Deep shit, and good appreciation ya got for what rhymin is...
It ain't beats, it ain't dissin...it's the feeling and meaning of what's said.
Looks like you get that...dope.

Rythmic...
You threw some tight multi's but some questionable metas...
Maybe they true and are on target, but some of em I've never heard of or are able ta varify...but that ain't your fault, maybe ya know some shit I don't (turk kids...huh?).
Good use of current events and shit...
Again, another deep message, but I felt, much harsher and darker than Thugz.
And more of a self-prop...
But still tight as fuckin virgins, man.

Peace

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Thanks for the comments dawg, nicely put and a good critic response, we need more of these in OM..

as for the Trapped Like Turkish School Kids.. bit, there wuz an earthquake in Turkey in about May or so, trapped Kids in a school, maybe a bit harsh on my part but..meh... If you can't Comment or Remark, then what can you do?

i thought this was a good drop, your flow was on target and it was a decent subject so it kept me interested, it was a good length, the main thing i can pick out that i didn't really feel was the hook, thought 3x was too many, two would have done...overall though nice piece...........keep it goin!