I was being sarcastik dawg... But let me be a bit more constructive in my critisicm...

Up side to the drop, it seemed really deep, and thats good skill to be able to put how you feel in words, cause i cant do that 4 shit...


So i was feelin' that in your verse.


Your flow was a bit off but it was alright, just needs to be set out a bit better... But it was alright flow...

Structure was alright but needed to be done a bit better, the song had a deep meaning, bu it was behind every line, some of the lines i felt i had already heard and unoriginal, but thats how it is when your new to the site. Also it seemed a bit re-pedative, always sayin i luv your my family, made it sound a bit queer for tha net...

So just throw in mroe multis, come up with more original lines, fix structure and flow a bit more, and you'll be writing ill open mcis with more practice. Cause it all comes together over time....

Ight dawg...

pce

thanks dawg

That was basic but you were reppin' and I love that. The flow was nice. I would recommend adding wordplay, metas and multies. But stay active and keep dropping and you'll elevate fam sho nuff. One+

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What the fuck is this?

^^thanks

WHAT THE FUCK?....that wasnt tight...! it really fuckin sucked..
half of it didnt rhyme...i dont even write open mics...and i could FREESTYLE a better drop...seriously KOT what are you doing? whatever im not even in omens anymore...for that reason...we lost talent and got...well...this shit!
peace