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Old 10-21-03, 02:26 PM   #1
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Tetra-Hydro 'white'

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Tetra-hydro ‘white’

Hell shit what is I supposed to do
Im sittin here drinkin it and smokin it wit you
I told my self to stop it to give my lung s a break
To relieve the ache, unmake the damage I intake
Anticipate in 10 years ill still be feelin great
Doctors talkin shit with unfounded medical crit
Bringin it to people whose lungs aint havin it
Deliberate divulgence, of grade 1 cannabis
Manikin im not, standin up for equal rights for this
Creatin bliss, from givin drink drugs the miss
Don’t think so, social problems will still exist
Upheaval, of a multi million making evil
Will destroy the economy like bomb of atom-ony
Should make it legal, a little stash of hash, smokin grass
Soothing the mind leave your body relaxed
Sit back in ya chair, unwind, in ya left hand a pint,
A joint in the right, first for the night
Hittin hard, sweat pouring, fuckin face is goin white
Next morning “this time im definitely stopping it for life”

………………………….lol….hit it plz
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Old 10-21-03, 02:36 PM   #2
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nice flow man, no doubt, thats what kept me reading it

good structure as well

hit ma open mic up
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Old 10-21-03, 02:42 PM   #3
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Yeah....this was a pretty good piece...it flowed pretty well through out it as i was reading it...your vocab was good, nothing wrong there i thought...your content was pretty good as well...structure was good...overall it was a good piece...keep at it...and keep dropping.
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Old 10-21-03, 02:59 PM   #4
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thanx for the feedback, it was just a quick sumthin i wrote, while chillin smokin.............thnx agian.......peace
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Old 10-21-03, 03:12 PM   #5
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good drop
nice vocab n flow
cud b a bit better but its good nonetheless

7.9/10
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Old 10-21-03, 03:12 PM   #6
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i liked the flow but there wasnt much else in there
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Old 10-21-03, 08:24 PM   #7
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it depends on how you look at it, have a smoke then read it, but THINK, bout it......lol....see ya
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