Face in my hands/ my heart on my sleeve/
the most important organ left open, so all can see that part of me bleed/
my face in my hands, i hide in my palms/
tears fall trapped, i wanna scream, but sink in the darkness that calms/
love is lost/ now the lonliness calls/ for me/
nightmares are my memories/ anything with you and me/
sweet dreams i do tend to see/ anything with you and me/
time moved us apart, ending/ anything with you and me/
you and me, You And Me, YOU AND ME- echoes get louder which is reversed/
repeatin all through my head, resounding makin it worse/
is it worth/ all this struggle and trouble/ you takin over my thoughts/
i don't know if im in love with you or not/
face in my hands, facin the facts/ exactly where i lose control at?/ tracin it back/ pacing my tracks/
you said "hello", I said "i do", my mind wandering, losing me, leading me, guiding me astray from my path/
away from my grasp/ the hold i had on all of my past/
on all reality/ falacy/ overtook in a flash/
face in my hands/ soul in an uproar/
chasin the man, while hes tearin my up more/
images i conjure/ urge me just to get up and leave/
but its not an option, you got my heart on a leash/
a part of my sees/ a girl thats naive/ livin in dreams/
but the other sees a hopeful that was duped and decieved/
victim of robbery/ burglary came by forced entry/ one injury/
i swore i wouldn't be the one, but in the end, of course its me/
call the police- i been had/ call the ambulance- i hurt so bad/
cupid missed me shootin, so I was stabbed/
damn. face in my hands, shakin my head/
could i have had a love? i don't know, its wasted instead/
layin in bed/ the times we shared replay in my head/
never ceasin/ just repeatin/ till the day that im dead/
i should be used to this/ this times not exclusive its/
like each time the smoothness hits/ tears me up in two, then splits/
sick of bein used and betrayed/ abused and afraid/
sweepin up my bits of attraction/ the reaction/ to hurt a man made/
a hand came/ and washed my worries away/
it brought to life, a love i wanted, that was burried away/
the same hand ripped out my heart, for that, im blamin this man/
for havin me dwellin in sorrow, with my face in my hands/

Hopefully I'll get a few responses....people just dont like to comment on none of my stuff...HOLLA

Most people don't like to take the time to read something so long... that's why, even though this is a good peice, you won't get many responses. Unless all the rest of Rapbattles cares to make me look like a dumbass...
The flow was amazing, your use of simple phrases andm emotions quickly rolled was well placed in this. I was upset in the beginning, I felt different emotions through out, no lie I about cried at the end... more emotional stuff that the words connected with but still. I felt like this peice flowed well. This is a new style that I havent' seen very much of... quick, flowing, emotional, repetative, impacting,....all of these come to mind when I think of this peice. You're gifted with a different spectrum of tallent, I hope to see more of it spread throughout this site. An keep ya head up an droppin more great peices.

thanks calisto for answerin wit somethin meaningful....don't get a lot of that. but i guess you're right about the length thing....good lookin

babygurl, this was a nice drop
It kept my interest up untill the very end
just heartfelt emotions
the way everything flowed was just tight as fuck... good structure, nice use of words and imagery
fav line:

call the police- i been had/ call the ambulance- i hurt so bad/
cupid missed me shootin, so I was stabbed

Keep droppin, this was definitely something I luved reading, although it was long, it kept my interest, so keep droppin gurl.

Resp

thanks so much split...i'm glad u read it, responded to it, and felt it...good lookin~

please respond, im tryna get better yall!!

when i read this i picture some one all hectic, who cant sit still who has so many emotions flying in them that they dont know what to do. i thought this was a great piece, and i agree it has a unique style to it, which worked well with this piece, and id liked to see more of it!!!! i thought the few repatives that you threw in it were very effective and strong, this was well put together and sounded good!!!!!!!

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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thanks filed, im glad u felt it, and responded...good lookin- still lookin for more!!

i know about the length thing, but please respond!

my last plea....

yo this was a nice peice and like they all said it was to long but once u read the first couple of lines you wanna finish reading it. NICE overall man. stay up

HOLLA