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Old 10-26-03, 01:58 AM   #1
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The Anti-Teen (featuring: Chrit)

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Four, then Chrit . .

Aside from their itchin', they won't even derive this emission
But continue to whine when my house is the size of their kitchen
My assumption's based on money, I'd correct my strongest, fattest woe
But how can I when reporters always stress the economic status quos?
I've pursued missioned pacts in hopes to educate musicians' acts
How can hope be an option when we won't face nutrition facts?!
Don't get up - keep reading, folks. . Hell, I dare'yuh to move!
While the aristocratic template is illustrated in America's youth
We're speculating talent & hoping to seperate "assailants. ."
who look to expose the hoes who try to replicate their ailments
Namely, "depression" - Surely, this lyrical sage absconds with ears
But I can't help to cry, "Wolf!" when I feel that I'm an age beyond my years

Vicious cycle of lies... In which we are all stuck...
From the homefront to abroad the whole world is corrupt...
This sucks... What happened to morals and work ethic?
Minds became basic...
Turned away from the truth... now the ugliness we must face it
A generation of lazy babies... The times are crazy...
Morons run the world... Seems like our future's hazy...
Time to make a change... Bring back original thought...
Take advantage of these freedoms for which we fought...
The media has it wrong... We should strive to be ourself...
Take forced values... And retire them to the shelf...
Need some help? Follow me... Into the in between...
Both what society loaths and loves... I'm the anti-teen....
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Old 10-26-03, 01:05 AM   #2
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the beat would have to switch for your verses but that is the only complaint i can think of .....this was very well composed flowed and tight in concept
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Old 10-26-03, 01:54 AM   #3
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Ill shit both of you guys. This is a very nice collab. The concept and vocab is on point plus it flows nicely. It is interesting to read which makes it an excellent open mic.
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Old 10-26-03, 09:24 AM   #4
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This was a good piece
You 2 had different styles, so it was a good read
Two stand points as well that made it unique
I thought this was a good piece from both of you...keep it up peace
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Old 10-26-03, 11:27 AM   #5
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pear tightness... cant really say much more. keep droppin guys.
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Old 10-26-03, 03:25 PM   #6
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to the top of the forum, where the real critiques may kick in .
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Old 10-26-03, 07:56 PM   #7
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one thread per day.
don't get mad about lack of critiques.
it is people like you who don't follow the rules and spam the forum that reduce the amount of quality critiques overall.
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