LM-Just me and a mic
Edicus+Potent+Ayura-Three minds combined
A.T+Da0-Remember Me

MMMmmmmMMM... remember those good old days, when you could go down to KFC and buy chicken cuz you moms gave you all the money that you could have wanted? Well here we go again.

Strut down the street with feelings runnin high, your in KFC heat
Imagining the sweet juice of the meat, as ya feet meet the street
Ya walk turns to a run, ya can't wait to enjoy all the chewing fun
Sometihng beats down hard on ya head, the sun, can't stop, run
Ya can see it in the horizen, ya running so fast, feel like ya glidin
A dog flings out from behind the fence, lashing at ya feet, hence...
Ya run faster then ever before, thinkin if I ran any fast I be in core
The dog stops right before the door, ya pull and it opens, god lord
Ya wait in line sniffin in the sweet air, sweat runnin from ya hair
Ya pay for the chicken and run home, feet bare, returnin to the lair

My first one, so lets get some feed back.

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First off I can't believe you did an open mic bout KFC. LOL.
Anyway the rhyme scheme worked....I'll give you that.
You've got the same problem as me...need to up you vocabluary.
Not bad for your first one....short and sweet. But if it was any longer it wouldnt of made the same impact.
Overall 6/10

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1940 - 2002

In Respect

^^^Yeah, well my name is KFC so I might as well write an open mic about it, but yeah, thanks a lot for the comments, they are really appriciated.

Uppin for some more feedback.

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that was different! i personally wouldnt make a song about kfc but do your thang homie.

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let's get this shit straight, i'm here to eliminate- them squadz wit feminine traits, there's no escape!

i liked it....lol...i really did...

thank u...u helped bring back some deerly lost memories....

i thought u had a ffew dope vocab pieces...

flow was dope aswell.....

i liked it...... 7.5(8)/10.....


anyway....holla mine broa..!!!

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=87346

haha nice drop, flow was good, vocab was decent but simple in places...structure was good...content was different and good...you got me wanting some kfc now...haha..damn now i'm hungry...keep dropping son...and hook me up with a 2 piece and a biscuit..lol


and if you get a chance peep my latest open mic and lmk what you think...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=88578

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Yeah this was alright lol...interesting topic though lol.......it flowed pretty well through out it.....vocab was alright, it could have been a little better, but still good though....you structured it well i though too....overall it was a good piece i thought....keep at it...and keep dropping.

this was a nice piece on a topic that in my opinion would be hard to write about...........u had a dope rhyme scheme thats what made this drop stand out..................................big ups

your flow worked well, and you had a nice structure.... you just need to elevate on the quantity and quality of the actual rhyming words, and the vocab.... but ill give this 7/10, it was one of the most creative things ive ever heard in an open mic.... lol its people like you who're gonna lead hip hop into the future :P

ps. im tired of hearing bling bling guns this guns that club this club that on the radio.... a keystyle about chicken? genius