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11-01-03, 07:22 PM | #1 | ||||||
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"the documentary of Jimmy"
IP: C1DA C961
some mutherfuckers think think they know my life
but these people can't possibly understand the strife or the struggle that seemed like a unsolveable puzzle the thought that i won't be able make it from this place they call hell the cell, should've been thankful that it was considered to be jail and it ain't what you think, i was on the brink of lose'n the trail lost my mother to a pussy who was 40 that had a mind that was 12 could've been one of those mutherfuckers whose ready to release those shells empty the gage on the shelf and send that fagget to hell but what good would that do, truth be told shit like this could happen to you, the story unfolds i was confused, couldn't think straight, but i knew how to cock this semi these pussy's don't know, this is the documentary of Jimmy some shit about to change i'm show'n you my pain on where my name was originated and how it was catapulted to fame some of these people won't be able to understand this flow and some of these people just won't know if they don't look pass what is put before them the fact that some of these cats claim i flow like slim i'm give'n these people somethin completely different from him but if yall can't take it maybe you should consider me like EM maybe then you'll find out the shit that i went through and possibly see the difference between me, him, and you Jimmy ain't just a mutherfuck'n shit talker that runs his mouth it's a story on me and how i came about why i talk about these guns and how i'm the King Of the South and putt'n these fingers up and not give'n a fuck about these bitches that doubt i've been where some of these rappers claim they've been did what some of these rappers claim they've did got out of the shit, but i didn't lose my sense made amends to my enimies but still feel a little bit tense that's why i stay with these guns, they got my back in this bitch don't try to just read this, understand where i'm come'n from so what if it ain't in perfect form, that ain't about nothin i ain't fuss'n, just show'n you how Jimmy too went through hustle'n this is true shit, i'm bring'n you people some new shit hit after hit, i'm show'n the ametures how to do this understand that i ain't nothin to fool with cause i do this shit fluent, that means i'll never lose it |
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11-01-03, 07:25 PM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: C1DA C961
yo! i know the flow is off a little, but please look pass that and see where i'm come'n from!
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11-01-03, 08:18 PM | #3 | ||||
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IP: 6FDC 23CB
This was a alright piece....try to keep your lines around the same length, sometimes you cant but should try....your vocab was ok, could be up'd a little....flow was off a little, but it was ok, work on some internals to help the flow out, and try adding some more multies to it....overall it was a alright piece....keep at it....and keep dropping.
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11-01-03, 10:00 PM | #4 | |||||
Can u beat me?..Hell No
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IP: 06AE 0DEE
yeah decent piece wit decent vocab............work on yo structure....your lines should be around the same length and u already know u need to flow a lil better...............keep writin
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