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Old 11-02-03, 03:24 PM   #1
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just a piece i came up with when i was in the county jail--its kinda old now

IP: 06D0 46D4

mentally anguished and ill minded rhyme spitter
like roger clemons on the mound i throw a no hitter
miraculous and talented was bleesed the gift of flow
i just unleash my toungue and it spits out pure gold
bling bling like b.g. and the cash money army
just give me some pills and a brew and its on G
high life's what im livin im forever john blaze
love'n these bitches but no love for no gay's
hate me if u want,im just bein me
i speak what i want, and mean what i speak
white boy is str8 nuts, i think hes lost his marbles
best believe it cuzzo,im unloading into all u
no shame whatsoever,aint scared of jack shit
fuck ur mother with a knife,open her up,split her clit
then shove u back in her,sew her up,and i split.
drive to the liquir store get a fifth and chug it.
just another day around the way,here in michigan
state full of crazy ass dudes,in and out of the pen.
we act on how we think,actually dont think at all
maybe thats why were all confined behind these brick walls.

DAMN!!!!!!!!!!fucked up aint it.
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Old 11-02-03, 03:36 PM   #2
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Word.. you was in Jail? What for?

To the piece:

The Flow is what made this piece good. Ya didn't lost the flow the whole piece, and that's a plus. Vocab was present in various lines, so props for that. Not really as deep as it coulda been, nawmean? I expected an emotion filled piece about struggles behind the bars and shit, but it's all good. I was impressed. Keep droppin, up the vocab, and keep the flow as is: On Point.

we act on how we think,actually dont think at all
maybe thats why were all confined behind these brick walls.
^^ Lotta meaning behind that bar. Best of the drop.


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=89235
^^ Drop a reply in return for my piece, aight?

-Formula.
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Old 11-02-03, 05:02 PM   #3
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thanx for the feedback,yea i was locked up a few times this last time it was for possesion of marijuana a few disorderly conducts and an underage drinkin.they gave me 97 days in the county.im tryin to stay outta trouble nowadys cause i cant afford no more lost time.holla.ya'll keep on comin with the feedback
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Old 11-02-03, 07:29 PM   #4
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Nice drop...

Good wordplay and flow...

Little multies used...

You fell off alittle after line 2 then caught back up towards the middle...

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mentally anguished and ill minded rhyme spitter
like roger clemons on the mound i throw a no hitter


^ My favorite...

Keep elevatin and sendin em...
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