its a lil cold imma turn da heat up//
im spittin flames imma burn da beat up//
im goin platium im attackin em//
shootin right bak at em//
extractin ya adams apple durin a say~aunts in a chappel//
rip yur skin off an glue it on again//
shit im gone wid another sin//
goin bak to da pen fuh ten//
im replacin yur face in abomin fluid//
im through wid droppin sick rhymes//
im goin go commit more crimes//
injectin aids infectin lead//
into mi i~balls,i cry at these flaws//
re~leavin stress by eatin moth balls//
all of yalls fear of bein ill//
is curin me still,i chill frozen ice//
i slice n spill mi guts into septic tanks//
an shoot mi intestines an point blank wid blanks//
sew em bak in an get more shitty//
wid these rhymes i ont show pitty//
fuk it imma get down to da nitty gritty//\\


juss a lil bit im thinkin bout turnin it into a song so i can finish makin mi track drop feed bak so i can improve please an imma be givin feedbak now so halla

it's aight thun but you got work on ya rhyming method da bars wasn't rhyming that well work on ya vocab you had alot of regular words in their switch things up kna mean other than that is was straight to me kna i'm sayin ~1~


p.s. when you tryin to write a song it's best to proofread ya shit after you wrote it so when you spit it you know what words to place or replace for ya bars