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Old 11-09-03, 02:17 PM   #1
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PoetiC SuicidE

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Ive been thinking about my life, pondering my months and days away,
Bits of my life flashing before my eyes, now I know I don't want to stay,
My parents, they were never there, they never even asked how I was feeling,
Thats why I did drugs, and then I quit my job, couldn't pay, so I started dealing,
I'm tripping on E now, my throat is full of smoke, but my heart.. its empty,
Drugs can't fullfil my needs, I need someone to care, someone to love me,
No one cares about me, I'm not worth anything to anyone, I'm just shit,
I've got to get rid of this empty feeling, so my wrists I have just slit,
Its taking over the emotional pain with each pump of my veins,
I love this feeling that I'm getting, its the closest I've gotten to sane,
I should finish my last goodbyes, My eyes are gettin heavy,
My thoughts are swimming inside my brain, my head is dizzy,
To my too few friends, I know you cared, but this is what I had to do,
My heart.. my soul.. to you, I hope you know the love we had is true,
This was inevitable, my only escape from depression was suicide,
I was alone, no one understood what I was feeling inside,
I'm done hiding my tears, I'm letting it out, its time to cry,
But this is over, This letter is my suicide, my final goodbye.
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Old 11-09-03, 05:31 PM   #2
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i would hate to have lost u before u could post sum more on rb...but ne waes....i like the flow the double rhymes an all that...i appreciated the short efficientness of the poem the point came out thoroughly an i like that....
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simply put"...wise words whisperd to deaf ears as no one hears the blurred proverbs that're always spoken clear so i fuckin swear that my where wont be here as time tolls..." second verse of 'Elevate' written by -shi-
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Old 11-09-03, 07:02 PM   #3
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thanks yo.. much appreciation. keep 'em comin
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Old 11-09-03, 09:45 PM   #4
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yea this drop was dope as hell...a deep topic through someone elses eyes...I like how u got the emotion displayed perfectly...almost flawless other than the fact that it brings me down reading it lol....good shit..u always gonna be a god at poetry lol

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Old 11-09-03, 09:52 PM   #5
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lol babii i love you.. thanks a lot for the feed back..

keep it comin!
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Old 11-09-03, 09:55 PM   #6
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^ hehehe....see guys...all you have to do is give good feedback..

lmao j/k....

u know I love u too but that's not why I like ya poetry...lol

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Old 11-09-03, 09:56 PM   #7
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hey,nice drop.So far ya stuff has been ill spittin' on some real sh!t.Hope to see more from ya, Stay ^
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Old 11-09-03, 09:56 PM   #8
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RaPiDFiRe; haha u kno you jus pop a boner over my poetry

Av1r3x; thankz.. your shit is ill too yo.. feedback is much appreciated 1luv
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Old 11-09-03, 09:58 PM   #9
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I don't pop a boner over u poetry....atleast not the ones about suicide (eewww that'd be freaky...but then again I am a freak lol) I DO pop a boner over your other things though....lol
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Old 11-09-03, 10:02 PM   #10
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! LoL OmG!!!


Anyway thanks for the feedback!
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Old 11-09-03, 10:03 PM   #11
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^ now let's just all get banned for freeposting!!!!!

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Old 11-10-03, 12:30 PM   #12
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wow nice piece
really
some dope shit over there
I was indebted into it from the very start
really dark images but ya kept it real and straight
luved it
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Old 11-10-03, 04:36 PM   #13
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^~^ThankS Y0...^~^
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Old 11-10-03, 09:29 PM   #14
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Once again great drop gurl. A topic in which I can totally relate to once again. Everything on this was great and heartfelt. Its weird there being someone like me, sorta. Idk, trippy too. But newayz, great job, keep it up. Much respect.
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Old 11-10-03, 10:47 PM   #15
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Thanks yo! Comin from someone with as much talent as you this means a lot. Much respect..
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