my aim is to elevate dreams//
eliminate fiegns with a beam of latent heat//
with elegncy i proceed to raise a blatent peak//
i gaze vacantly at a gradient which violations seep //
ethnical speech is made with question that orbit over a mind thats torment//
like clark kent i find my closet persona hexed and delude//
A fathering moon mourns with a spetrum of views //
born to break through with my alternative wisom //
in 1 verse i perform sugery without the works of incision//
i see vison throuhgh lids of blepharitis//
u only exist because i thought of it//
devils coke ya breath takes hold wit tight grip//
i capture with cancer to infest taurus and carprcorn with it//
yet in which eloquently scrutinized to toture mics//
during a preceding life i reached my quest of norhten lights//
in mankind we reech the dawn for lord of flys//
cus even the imortal likes are short of life//
Got u shook similar to cerebral-palsy//
My thoughts illustrates images that only men of the war see//

well..

you had some good flow there but the line lenght threw it off a few times

the wordplay was lacking, from what i saw, might want to work on that

not much to say here, it was short and sweet...no real draw back

good drop kid

if you would be so kind hit No Tomorrow from my sig

The opening liens flow were really complex, but the rest of the piece fell of, places were good, others def weren't, the content was okay, the multis made the flow 5/10, but could of easily been stepped up, content was 5/10, this wasn't a bad piece

Elevate

ay dawg that was a decent verse, ok flow, ok wordplay, and nice ending line. PEACE homie

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HOLLA