FAKE THUGZ-LM
JUST 17 YARS OLD-set-ignorance
WORD PERFECT DISSES-phrantik


bitches, i'm gonna take away your blood like a crip/
but i'm neither, you could say i am a crud or a blip/
i am so full of my self, i can dominate any/
more come backs than Stans best freind Kenny/
(for the stupid fags, kenny is a south park charachter that is killed evry episode)
some of you think that your rhymes flow the lightest/
but your gang signs look like chronic arthritis/
well, i guess i'll get back to the point of my own rap/
cuz you all know, i've been known to get off track/
but i have been elevating, now i'm stabily wack/
i am iller than sars if you just look into my lungs/
that is where my meiphores and verses are hung/
waitin to escape for evryone to hear/
comes from my mouth and creeps into your ear/
thats it hoes, i like my drops ended Kwik/
(kwik is another of my aliases)
alot of poeple know me as handcuffs or eklipz/

if you got off the dr sues rhymes you might have potential. seriously crip and blip? and stop with the bragging tracks cause you aint that nice, bragging track wont get you anywhere, write songs with meaning to them.

work on your flow to, use some inner rhymes or mulites.

^^^wurd.to.that.

try to say something.. and if you don't then at least do it in a creative and impressive fashion. also... brackets explaining lines are not needed... especially in the middle of the verse.
.peace.

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I'm a goblin hooked on rails, stuck drinking ale/ I'll rip the horn out a unicorn and shove it up your fairy tale.

opposite of downin'

I really like the method of how you write your rhymes, if you write about something that trying to write about other things would help your skill develop, keep up the good work man....

looking forward to checking out some new shit....
peace