thanks homie i appreciate that and i still want some more feedback so holla the fuck at me yall.

Standing strong while enimies - put up difence//
Fire blazing / under-estimated but so intence//
Tables turn / the renegade arrives, as solidures commence//
you got to add to the equation/ or give in - to life's suspence//
Cowards wanna lie bleading - and the youth - still betrayed//
never knowing - losing breath - that you could die the next day//
music elivates the mind, take a breah and pray for better days//
couldn't imagion how many out there who feel the same way//

yo man, yours was nice still, like i said

ay that was nice for the collabo but ur missin 12 lines for that first verse and i already got my 1st verse. holla at me through PM so we could talk bout the collabo some more and make this shit raw to get some feedback.

As a RENEGADE soldier I apply a setting// re-addressing the parents of the children listening// an insult to many members of society// but to hate in discriminate, better off disliking me// sufficiently a RENEGADE with a chip on one shoulder// I carry a microphone as a weapon to conceal ya// illing n killing, creating a mass slaughter// laughing at these women, while im impregnating there daughter// taller n harder than most of these cats, slamming against instigators with metal baseball bats// throwing these caps like there worthless sapiens// how can I fuck this bitch, she’s only developed raisins// patients n parents ranting n raving// how can I react to this public fame craving// slaving over this industry that made me, as a RENEGADE soldier, to disappear isn’t that easily// So here's your sleazy collab for a reply, ay yo obsenity where’s the dots so I can apply.. Peace

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I really like the ideas and shit, I realize being a renegade is the main topic, but if you use it too much in material it tends to get old.