FOR MY BEST FRIEND RIKA AND MY EX TERRY

i walked into the clearing and there you were with him!
The boy i loved!
girl you were supposed to be my best friend!!!!
how could you do this to me?
i really want to know!
was it done to get back at me for reasons that are unknown?
or its it that you just want him for yourself?
well if you want him take him!
no longer do i want him for my only and one.
he was untrue just like you.
i trusted the two of you but all i got
was a stab in the back and a great big FUCK YOU!

see i trusted you teddy bear.
trusted you to always be tru!
but i guess that was a lot to much to expect from anyone! especially you!
you hurt me beyond all reason!
you made me want to die!
now i know that you'll only be worth it when pigs can fly!

rika, my baby girl, my very best friend.
how could you do that with him???
you knew we were together,
i know you did!
i told you when he asked me out!
you got upset about it!
i'm sorry if i hurt you but something like that i'd never do!
i respected you way to much!
but that didnt matter much to you.
you still fucked my boyfriend...

terry, its time for you to stop with the lies,
games,and the little role plays
its time for you to stop trying to kiss me
and nibbling on my neck and hugging me!
its over!
dont you get it?
its time for you to stop telling me you love me
cuz its obvious you dont.
how could you do that to me?
you really hurt me!

and rika back to you
i thot you were my friend!
i loved you like a sister!
then you went and did that shit!
please stop telling me that things will be ok
cuz they wont and i know this because
it was by u my x was fucked!
you fucked our relationship up!
how could you do that to me?
you know i loved him more than anything!


sry but i cant think of anymore right now...i'm basically venting...

well.. you got emotion out. Anger, and hurt.. but you could've put it in a better form.. rather than the one part of it being a paragraph looking form. You could still get more emotion out.. lookin forward to more pieces from you though... keep 'em comin.

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cool i'm still workin on it ya know

^yep and I can't wait to see the finished project

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lol its coming along now...

oh shit waddup yo ur a juggalette??? I happen to be a juggalo lol...

neway yea u coulda put this in a better form....and it also seemed more like a rap than a poem....regardless of all that u got ur anger out n shit..and I can tell ur a juggalette cuz u wanna kill that bitch lol....put a hatchet in her forhead...

btw I got a twizted ayngel lol

peace

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Play or get played

like you said at the end, this piece was mostly meant for venting, not much else other than to get emotions out and heard, and girl they were. your emotions and thoughts were clearly heard throu this piece, but maybe it should be your friend and ex that you show this too, let them see how big of asses they have been.

if you write a piece that is a pure vent, thats great, it gets the purest emotion out onto paper. but after your down, and things have cooled over a bit, pick it back up and focus on your stucture , vocab, flow, ect.

this was a good read all and all, but id like to see it taken and re-done too.

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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