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Old 11-16-03, 03:31 PM   #1
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the ethnicty of this rap shit is simplicity stamped
clamps just standin there like blockade runners
cuz if u aint black u aint one of the mic stunners
but if we got droped into one booth
used one mic - one nick - and we all sick
there'd still be racial-ism ~ comin from within-um'
but if someone ghost wrote for pac'
and it finally dawned that the kid who wrote it
was white and wanted in hip-hop
ur whole opinion would change
'why that white-boy on stage'
just a simple rage cuz u want it
but he deserves it
from the heart to the mind to the earths-surface
u finna say this whack and i didnt earn it
but my cerbrealness keepin me fightin
cuz even tho i aint black - im still writin
and one day - my clamps finna tighten
ur egos finna lighten
then rap will be back to normal
but untill then all i gotta say
*pause*
is that when i grab the mic - and bout to spit
my inner rage opens up and i quit- cuz im white...

im ghost
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Old 11-16-03, 03:43 PM   #2
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Old 11-16-03, 04:11 PM   #4
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It started off ok, seemed to decline as it went on though, flow got choppy as it continued and you seemed to get tied up trying to link your various thoughts together into one piece. I didnt like the whole `white` idea, that didnt appeal to me, nbut thats your choice to take it that way its just saying 'Finna' when your white makes it sound dumb to me, flow was sketchy, content wasnt anything standout, wording could use work, more multi's and internals would spice this up.

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