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11-16-03, 03:34 PM
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Truth Hurts - ft. RhythmicTendencies
IP: 24A3 0EF0
replied to camarac c-section and a few others whos names i cant remember
u fucked my girl didnt you?dont try to lie behind hidden truth 'anger boiled into my fingers' mood itching at the trigger to shoot' Right Now, Calm Down man, Take A Deep Breath... Or My Colt 45 Will Be The Cause Of Your Death... dont act friendly u stabbed me in the back with a knife called envy 'fury sends my finger trembling the eager bullets whisper to temp me' Fuck You, I'm Gettin Angry n' Impatient... My Mind Is Gettin' Furious, I'm Tryin' To Sedate It... dont twist the story here i've been married to Jenna for 14 years 'emotions started to make me tears welling up inside to drown my fears' Why You Tryin' To Give Me The Blame... Fuck She Claimed That Your Marriage Had Lost It's Flame... u sick bastard she loved me!i know she'd never leave our family tree 'the roots were knotted by bitter seed my feelings swelled, branched and seethed' Man, She Didn't Even Love Your Sorry Ass... All You Did To Her Was Abuse, Hurt n' Harass,,, the only finger i laid on her was love, ur the cunt that turned her onto drugs! 'the trigger screamed to release the slugs, gleeful deaths hands began to rub' One More Unearthly Word, Your Speaking shit Absurd... You Wern't Even Suppose To Know That The Moment Occurred.. i told u we hold no secrets traitor you cant shatter deepest love with ur capers 'enraged by this hateful faker i squeezed slowly on my fateful nature I'm Only Tellin' You The Honest Truth.... I Knew You Had Problems, I Was Watchin' You Wit Sleuth... Jesus christ!my heads damaged from all this excess baggage 'the poisoned chalice that carried adultery over poured with malice' I'll Damage You'd Head Even More In 10 Seconds... If You Don't Quiten Down, Your Immediate Death Beckons'... my hand gripped death and squeezed its release of mess 'i turned it to mouths last breath and blew my troubles away...now laid to rest Oh Shit, I Didn't Think he'd Go Through With The Deed... Took Only One Shot But Now I Guess .... Your Feed... Last edited by fgee : 11-16-03 at 03:38 PM. |
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11-16-03, 06:18 PM
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..Soft Focus..
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IP: 1B3B C284
Damn, You both had a great flow and great emotional wordplay I liked how you made this collab it was different, this was a good read keep it up
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11-16-03, 09:29 PM
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
upping....dont sleep
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11-16-03, 09:57 PM
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IP: 0684 7861
SLEEP.... It's Official.
This was a good concept if it was intended on how I took it... this was a psychotic man talking to himself right? He's talkin' to a different side of him... well this was dope. These kids need to take off their pajamas & read this. |
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11-17-03, 11:09 AM
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IP: 4514 2C8C
uppin'
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11-17-03, 11:21 AM
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IP: 399E F0FD
This was a really nice peice, the way you both worked together on it and everything. It flowed very well, the only thing I can say about it is write it a little different when your typing it up, it's easier to read if you like break up phrases and everything...other than that, good job man"s"
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11-17-03, 03:02 PM
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IP: C4EA A331
uppin'dy
upppin'dy |
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11-17-03, 11:37 PM
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IP: 3B78 B6CE
very nice peice... you used a style I aint seen before on RB...
PRops... your flow was on... your vocab was good, and the emo you put into this was fucking awesome... nice drop... the only thing I could say you needed to work on was your structure, but nice drop... ~AshY~ |
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11-18-03, 08:09 AM
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
this is gay
upping.. |
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11-18-03, 08:23 AM
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IP: FF40 570D
Dope
Flowed wel from both,..Fgee had some nice vocab and a good concept.. Rhytmic had some dope lines in his part..and it was putted damn nice together.. Both of u collabbed very well and the result was just Dope!. Props..
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11-18-03, 09:47 AM
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IP: 8CA6 9951
Dope piece. .Really interesting.. well written, god vocab, flow, blah blah..all good
Apart from. .I felt this was the most played peice i seen. I mean, this is nearly the same as on the slim shady LP. .dre and eminem, Same sort of story, But maybe its cuz i been listening to it recently, anywho this was good. .N/O |
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11-18-03, 05:11 PM
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
uppin again...
i'll reply on yours if u reply here |
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11-18-03, 05:29 PM
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IP: 2A26 A9C2
Holy fucken shit, this is the dopest piece i have ever read. It kinda reminds me of guilty conciense. Both of you guys did incredibly ill.
9.5/10 |
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11-18-03, 06:17 PM
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
didnt even think of guilty conscience when we did this shit
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11-18-03, 08:15 PM
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IP: 4577 CD9A
Werd. It reminded me of Guilty Conscience too. It's kinda vague becuz I dont know if the character is talki nto himself or the guy who had sex with his wife. But this is very good keep spittin
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