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Old 11-16-03, 03:37 PM   #1
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An Audio Verse

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This is my 2nd verse to my first audio

Fuck Mods- Started With The Merk Squad Ya Heard God
From Dirt Yards To Earth Pods You'll Get Hurt Hard
Ya Tards Don't Have The IQ For Me To Fight You
They Don't Like You, Just Go Get Ya Sister To Hype You
I'm Bright Too, So You Can Just Shine The Light Through
Ya Mics Through- Ya Not iLL-No One Ever Bites You
Another HaiKu- I'm Tight To Beginning To Finish
Ya Futures Deminished-Out Of Sight & Lookin' Grimace
In A Minute-You Could Lose Ya Life Twice-I'm That Nice
InTice Ya To Sacrafice Ya Neck For Me To Slice
Roll The Dice-Finish The Clip Or Have Fun With The Knife
More Strife-Just Give Me A Reason To Go Fuck Ya Wife
Out At Night- If It's Out Of Mind Then It's Out Of Sight
Doubt My Might, Dealt With Accordingly-Out To Fight
See It Right- Nothing Will Be Left In Ya Chest To Digest
Hold A Vest- The Smith & Wess Will Have Ya Second Guess
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Old 11-16-03, 04:10 PM   #2
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not bad...good for audio i guess
flowed well thru out
content was alright nothing eye popping
get it to a beat n it'll b cool
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Old 11-16-03, 04:20 PM   #3
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Yeah, it'll probably be 89667987 times better over a beat, plenty of internals and multi's in it to keep the flow, short bars, not sure where the breathing pockets are meant to be in this so it might be hard to keep the breath control but it was bad, content wise it was decent

drop the link to the audio in here when its done.
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Old 11-16-03, 06:37 PM   #4
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Thanks for the feedback...
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/5/meta5music.htm
Theres the link to the audio, my quality sounds like shit, I was fucked up in the first verse so Im kinda slurring & shit, but I'll rerecord it later..
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Old 11-17-03, 02:43 PM   #5
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pop this sint your usual it seamed a lil basic but i know it will be ill on audio im looking froma text point of view .....do you twin stay up and hit me up
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Old 11-17-03, 05:45 PM   #6
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Old 11-17-03, 07:18 PM   #7
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Didnt like the capitals everywhere but I read past..
everything was there, it flowed great but i cant really critique on a seperate verse.. nothing really eyepoppin and its all jus murderin some cat.. umm.. anyways.. return the fav playa and drop some feed on one of my open mics (they are on my sig) l8rz
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Old 11-17-03, 08:58 PM   #8
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Came off decent in audio....

You really need to work on quality though man....

Good multis/internals...

Good shit fam...

Get at me on AIM sometime... We'll collab audio...
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Old 11-18-03, 10:29 AM   #9
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Fuck Yeah I need to work on Audio. My Man Kreative from RC is gonna help me out with that, but no doubt when it's better we gonna collab. and to other comments, yeah I know it's not the best text wise but it's a quick something to flow well to get my audio out.
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Old 11-18-03, 10:30 AM   #10
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Oh, and I replied to Cam's shit, Word Perfects Collab... too lazy to grab links...... plus, thanks for the feedback
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Old 11-18-03, 12:41 PM   #11
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i agree in that this seemed basic, limited vocab, but yeah i see how it would go with a beat,.........it flowed nicely.....Pc
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Old 11-19-03, 02:29 AM   #12
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Vocab? LOL... I don't rap dictionaries... and yes, it was basic in terms of text... look at the internals & shit.. but yeah, ill be droppin something else soon. going to AZ tomorrow
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