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Old 11-16-03, 05:40 PM   #1
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Dao Presents "Blocked Pathways"

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DaO Represents "Blocked PathWays."

My mind is another pathway straight from hell
So i Travel down it constantly within hardned Dells
Now the skin on my feet are peelin off
And my 9 lives are all gettin shot
So wheres my life lead to, back to where i came from
Or Forward and Forward till Past hits my Done Button

"What is it that constantly Troubles my days.
Answer: Im caught in pathways that circle like a Maze.
What is it that Holds my nike's down to Dirty Paths
Answer: These Swooshes are leded down by my Hard Past"

Let The Begginin meet my Present Cuz Ittle Be Suprised
Ive Grown To A Mc Where my Elevation is already aRived
By And By i used to Bide My Time to Set Fire
To This Game, Disastourus To Fake Vets Fame
Cuz They Know They'll Burn and Fall Like Gasoline Rain
I'm Prophetical---
The Way
I Leave Many Rosters Lyraclly InSane
So much they leave their fuckin aims
So i can Peep Em Back and mention their lame.
Instead Everyday Im Feelin Fake Mentionin My Name
Where Are The Uniquie Oppertunitys that i Left Behind
Stupid Child Hood Got my Spirit in this Religion Left Behind
Now I only have a pen n pad and a burger flippin Mind

"What is it that constantly Troubles my days.
Answer: Im caught in pathways that circle like a Maze.
What is it that Holds my nike's down to Dirty Paths
Answer: These Swooshes are leded down by my Hard Past"


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Old 11-16-03, 05:47 PM   #2
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Old 11-16-03, 07:18 PM   #3
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Old 11-16-03, 07:48 PM   #4
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i like it.....
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Old 11-16-03, 07:58 PM   #5
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I hafta kinda disagree, rhyme scheme was to basic and I thought ur structure was kinda wack. u had some wordplay vocab could be upped a bit and same go's for multi's. but one thing I did like about this piece was ur hook that ur hook was tight. keep elavatin bro. peace.
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Old 11-17-03, 11:37 PM   #6
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Thanx for feedback.
I didnt even like my Hook
but o wells
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was a freestyle
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