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Old 11-21-03, 06:24 PM   #1
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Thug Life

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Ill never give up
heads still up - slantin it wit pride
put the troubles to the side
and just ridddeeee
the decision-is-mine...

As i watch the barrel-flash
and the farewell-to-life-splash
i dash into the nearest path
runnin and not lookin back
head the attack never fear
never retreat
becuz at the seat - of the cup u will drink wit fallen foes
caught a murder case
for some hit i did 5 years ago
i member that nut exactly the spittin-of-clips
clashin-fists, masive-hits
cats droppin-clips poppin
a ghetto 14 year old murderin
on top of the world
till it all crashed beneath-him
but in his mind u cant defeat-the-young
cuz its thug life he yelled
when the truck came for awaital
it all came crashin-down-to-tha-ground
snatched the 5 0's gun~slangin-to-the-mouth-and-clickin-the-sound
layed dead wit a clip aquital into his forhead....
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Old 11-21-03, 06:27 PM   #2
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this was nice kinda choppy...simple vernacular in this but it worked well though

you should work a little on structure so its easier to read though

much props good write

peace
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Old 11-21-03, 06:33 PM   #3
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good flow son,work on elevatin ya wordplay and creativity


played topic though

other than that, nice
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Old 11-21-03, 06:35 PM   #4
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thanks yo upp
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Old 11-21-03, 08:24 PM   #5
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Not Bad.. Like It Was Said.. Choppy
But Decent At That.. Coulda Been Better
Work On It Sum More

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Old 11-22-03, 07:45 AM   #6
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too much thugness boy. you know, this aint that wack. i kind of like the world play. but still you need to learn that you in the real world.
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Old 11-22-03, 12:24 PM   #7
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work on structure but u still gets props 7.5/10
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Old 11-22-03, 12:47 PM   #8
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Flow Was Choppy, Lacked Decent Word Play, Topic Was Played, Structure Was Bad. Not Sayin That This Drop Was Totally Wack, You Jus Need To Work On Some Things Aight. Keep Droppin.

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Old 11-22-03, 05:48 PM   #9
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dat shit was iight......needs more time into it i think holla at me iight
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Old 11-22-03, 09:55 PM   #10
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STUFF WUZ TIGHT, GOOD FLOW, KEEP SPITTIN'
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Old 11-22-03, 10:01 PM   #11
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wtf...^^^...these are freeposts...

well...it wasnt 100% wack...keep workin, u got potential. but honestly i didnt like it. nothing was really special about it. but like i said, keep working. kick in some nice structure and topics, i think you got the potential to be ill at rhyming words. just keep practicing.
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