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Thug Life
IP: 27B1 49F3
Reps:
C-section SnakeEyes Tribz Ill never give up heads still up - slantin it wit pride put the troubles to the side and just ridddeeee the decision-is-mine... As i watch the barrel-flash and the farewell-to-life-splash i dash into the nearest path runnin and not lookin back head the attack never fear never retreat becuz at the seat - of the cup u will drink wit fallen foes caught a murder case for some hit i did 5 years ago i member that nut exactly the spittin-of-clips clashin-fists, masive-hits cats droppin-clips poppin a ghetto 14 year old murderin on top of the world till it all crashed beneath-him but in his mind u cant defeat-the-young cuz its thug life he yelled when the truck came for awaital it all came crashin-down-to-tha-ground snatched the 5 0's gun~slangin-to-the-mouth-and-clickin-the-sound layed dead wit a clip aquital into his forhead....
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IP: 0D29 2657
this was nice kinda choppy...simple vernacular in this but it worked well though
you should work a little on structure so its easier to read though much props good write peace |
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IP: F678 AD90
good flow son,work on elevatin ya wordplay and creativity
played topic though other than that, nice |
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This is my first post!
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IP: 27B1 49F3
thanks yo upp
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Banned: Permanent
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IP: 5F2A E1C0
Not Bad.. Like It Was Said.. Choppy
But Decent At That.. Coulda Been Better Work On It Sum More HIt This UP http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...?threadid=93139 |
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Flyweight
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IP: 5A4B 6334
too much thugness boy. you know, this aint that wack. i kind of like the world play. but still you need to learn that you in the real world.
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 4577 CD9A
work on structure but u still gets props 7.5/10
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Guest
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IP: E38C 4580
Flow Was Choppy, Lacked Decent Word Play, Topic Was Played, Structure Was Bad. Not Sayin That This Drop Was Totally Wack, You Jus Need To Work On Some Things Aight. Keep Droppin.
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IP: 6C10 AFD5
dat shit was iight......needs more time into it i think holla at me iight
one Supreme Da Ghost |
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Registered User
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IP: 623C 240C
STUFF WUZ TIGHT, GOOD FLOW, KEEP SPITTIN'
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Middle Weight
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IP: 4CED 5148
wtf...^^^...these are freeposts...
well...it wasnt 100% wack...keep workin, u got potential. but honestly i didnt like it. nothing was really special about it. but like i said, keep working. kick in some nice structure and topics, i think you got the potential to be ill at rhyming words. just keep practicing.
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