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The Clown of His Own Life - KLINIK
Keystyled - BIGjoke
Corrupted Mind - Withersman

[Verse 1]
I'm the guy behind you releasing vibes that no man can proscribe
My situation can't be described, it's a disorder no doctor can prescribe
I'll write a verse so thought out when played backwards there's a converse
Don't listen! Your being immersed with my lyrics contrary to your adverse
I'm a hypnosis that will have you suffering from a symptom, combat neurosis
My prognosis is your nerves will wear thin as if you had multiple sclerosis
Changing business men to criminals and criminals to business men
It's hard to comprehend until you listen over and over again while it sinks in
Parents cover your child's ears before he or she hears notes sharp as shears
It appears I may be the first pioneer to settle in a life of clouded atmosphere
My words aint spoken as you would think, they're rehearsed till everythings in sync
Every syllable is a link to something so distinct you'll miss it if you blink

[Chorus x2]
Welcome to a session of reverse psychology
Causing mc's to do the converse of my anthology
And when it's done it's done with no apology
I gotta rap sheet so long it's titled Chronology

[Verse 2]
Now that you're in my grasp I own you, I'm the director of the cast
That will soon be amassed to watch a demonstration of why I'm unsurpassed
I influence actions and have people seperated...devided like fractions
My message is like fog...a deadly distraction, irony is there's a cristal clear attraction
So much skills I have them filed alphabetic and it's all me, nothing is genetic
You're drawn to this cause it's magnetic with no cure like being diabetic
An underground cat on the rise with a name that is which it implies, MP~PHASIZ
Shouldn't come as a surprise that the rap game relies on me and what I supply
I'm non-merciful with a lyrical ability, it's considered a miracle to spit how I do
I can construe the most complex verse, i'm the capital of rap like Balsam is to Peru
Ya probaby receive a system overload as I scan your worth like a universal product code
I have a higher speed rate than the asynchronous transfer mode, I'ma explode

[Chorus x2]
Welcome to a session of reverse psychology
Causing mc's to do the converse of my anthology
And when it's done it's done with no apology
I gotta rap sheet so long it's titled Chronology

[Verse 3]
It's hard to grasp the fact that I have an influence on people with whom I interact
My thoughts are exact, in and out as if traveling through the gastrointestinal tract
I can't stop, that's like telling me that I lack the skills to make a career of hip hop
That's like telling me to respect a cop, I drove through the octagon sign that read stop
I'm an amazing intellectual who's actual the complete opposite of the word ineffectual
It's constitutional for my rhymes to be compositional, have you in a mind state binomial
A song to screw up your judgement of what's right and wrong the more I go on
I have a medal I wear upon my chest that I won for a stronger structure than exon
I've found what I been looking for..the ability to extract your soul like a uranium ore
You'll surrender to my tactics as did Athens when involved in the Peloponnesian War
By now you're probably dead weight, unable to communicate, decrease your matoblic rate
You heard of Mithridates The Great? Well I'm more of a mastermind than the shit he create

[Chorus x2]
Welcome to a session of reverse psychology
Causing mc's to do the converse of my anthology
And when it's done it's done with no apology
I gotta rap sheet so long it's titled Chronology

real good vocab
altogether good song
good chorus too
excellent flow, you've done this before

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=93377

hit it if ya can^^

You forgot to leave 3 links or 3 names of feedback you left for other people or this will get deleted..

But yeah i do agree this was a pretty good piece....the flow was good i thought, got off at a few spots but it was good overall...the vocab was real good...I liked the chorus...you structured this pretty well i thought also...overall this was a pretty good piece.

I keep forgeting about that shit...

Werd, this shit was hott, good vocab. It was kinda long but I kept reading it cuz thats how long some of my drops are, so no need to complain. The chorus was hott to homie. Keep spittin.

thats was da bomb nukka, keep it up, u be the next emenim.....
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nice drop specially vocab and punches ...keep ya head held high

Thanks for your feedback

You have an excellent vocabulary, your bars are a bit too long to flow correctly, work on that. You have a very scientific/intelligent style...sort of liek the canibus-man. This was a solid track, I'd like to see you shorten th ebars up a bit and drop it to audio.

7/10

Work on your lfow, and you'll be vicous.

P.e.a.c.e.

yeah, it seems like cani's influenced you .. your vocab is good, although, it dosent suit this piece and its like you over did it and sacrificed content for vocab .. that took away from the piece i felt and effected your content through it .. its nice to see you have internals, but a lot of them are basic rhyming and not really up to much .. try to use more multi's in your pieces, but dont over do them .. also, your flow is off like woah as i read it .. you need to shorten up your bar lengths .. the hook was alright but not really needed .. seemed pointless to me .. but ehhh, your choice.

just constructive crit from one open mic head to another.

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Yeah, i was quick to find that my bars were too long when I went to make an audio of this. So the song's currently being edited...

Yo that was some ILL shit i loved tha vocab it was tight as fuck keep it up man it was dope overall 8/10

liked the chorus. flowed smooth

nice vocab fo sure. liked the historical refrences, u definately got intellect.

only critisism is that almost every line seemed to have sumthing to the effect of: 'i'm like this, my skill is like this, etc.' maybe throw in a line here n there that is pure set-up for the punch. just cus its a long read n the lines r less effective if it seems repititios.

nice work thou. pc

yo that was mad cool...i liked it alot. thought what kidna ruined it a lil was its bad structure and flow. cuz of the length of the lines...if that had good flow it would have been ill as fuck. good job though

8/10

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