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This is purely fiction, all characters exist only the in artist's head for entertainment's sake...check the story
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=93385 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=93205 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...5699#post925699 When you read this, don't expect another run of the mill open mic peice that you see on this board, can i get some real replies cause i put real work into this...It's worth the read tho Topic: You’re a camera, describe what pictures you take. A roll of pictures, images of happiness flicker Memories of a melted wick and a forgotten bicker I’ve taken many pictures, visions and images The stuff families reminisce peacefully in villages Speaking of families, here's a photo book that will unfold gradually Black and white, melancholy glances under my light A mother and her son, unconditional love in my sight Several poses filled with joyous smiles and red roses It’s a bright summer day they chose to dance with naked toes Through the forest and field, the honest I yield Blond hair dancing, blue eyes scanning the wondrous feel The generous mother kneels to offer her son palms closed Next picture, the son chasing her flying butterfly, her love grows Such is the first few pages of my album and it's traces Smiling faces and forgotten memories and sensations * Flip a few pages* A solo mother, being held by her husband in tears Culmination of fears from years as the end nears Here’s a picture of a locket, taken from the mother's pocket Inside there's a picture of her son, unknown is the topic But now he's only a distant memory, a source of pain Outside their dismal shack flies tragedy, of course it's rain But what happened to the young, carefree boy you ask? I can tell you from previous photos, something very rash He was kidnapped by a masked man, and later found dead The parents found him too late, only to find the ground red Their portraits have never been the same, reflecting their pain Blank stares, dirty, tired faces with tears and their stains Even me, the inanimate worthless camera feels their hurt This murdered better stay in the shade and under the dirt.. .....for his own sake *Flip a few more* Oh dear god, these are the worst, confirmed with a nod Pictures of blood froma heart and mangled body parts upon the sod A crime scene photo of a bullet, silencing the farmhouse's whisper A photo an earlobe cut into pieces the size of a mouse's whisker A photo eyeball that deserves it's case, alone, still holding its nerves A photo of the saddened parents being taken away in cuffs I don’t lie, I’ve got photo evidence, this isn't the day for bluffs Flip the page, to previous days where the murdered surfaced The parents found his purpose, solved the crime and made the purchase Found what'll hurt this punk the most, a sawed off shotty Planned to lure him and leave the rats to knaw on his body The last photo of my album, the one that was made at that moment I created a lasting image of this second murder that's in their head, frozen.... The mother shot her son's murderer.... |
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played but straight
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^LMFAO ... Homeboy's trippin ... This was dope Peeps ... An original topic ... And dope too ... Very abstract ... Very well written ... Scheme and multi's were on point ... Didn't catch the flow fall off once in this piece ... Imagery was highly dope in this piece ... Everythin' came together well to make this piece dope ... The way U wrote the first verse opened this piece up a lot to me and made me keep readin' ... But how U changed the story was even better ... Keep doin' your thing man ... Oh and by the way ... From that post up there ... I should juss say this now ... Nice havin' u here for a day ... LoL ... Peace
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now thats a reply kiddies^
LoCo.....didn't even read it |
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rofl yea i did
it got played at the end 'body shotty' fuck u dont come in my shit and hate
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uppin' this so that my man can get some more replies on this ... stop sleepin' ... peace
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Loco. . You Seriously Gotta Problem Kid.
Peepers. . I Haven't Been Able To Say This In Awhile. . So It Feels Good To Say-- You Had An Original Topic ! Props For That. Very Drop Read Man. Great Imagery Throughout The Piece. I Loved The Idea Of Writing This Piece From A Camera's Point Of View. . That Shit Was Nice. Well-Written On Your Part Man, I Loved How The Story Switched Up, From Talkin About The Son's Death Then Sayin That The Mother Purchased A Shotty To Kill The Murderer. Great Shit. Flow Never Once Fell Off When I Was Readin It. Very Dope Read For Me, I Enjoyed It. Keep Droppin The Gems. -Formula. Last edited by Formula : 11-22-03 at 01:20 PM. |
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word
thx fellas |
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I replied to this at RM and RnR .. im not doing so again, lol.
<-- Baron Mynd You already saw my opinions on this. Pz.
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ah yes, thx man
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naw good shit man
keep the visuals up and defenitly the vocab not always flowin but thats cool one..................................... |
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this is a good peice fellas, dont sleep |
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