A dark shadow emerges over the blackness of the land/
unstoppable power surges through the glock in his hand/
just earning stripes, taking lifes, you wouldn't understand/
he just needs some protection think this is the life he planned/
naw mabye planned obselecency as he screams quit testing me/
says his prayers to elevate to a higher degree so his soul can blessed be/
trying to rise above violence but its not part of the recipe/
so out of rage and defiance he prays now to the life of the street/
he's just a young man growing up dazed and confused/
with a fucked stance on life cause his soul has been abused/
he screams i don't give a fuck they ain't got the power to take me/
as he bows his head and speaks the scripture of the 9 milli/
you shine brightly and protect me, keep me safe from my foes/
you make it so no man disrespects me and stays on his toes/
your always by my side personified to you i now pray/
be ever vigilant and carry me through to my next day/
In your name i pray as i blast the next man/
I feel the warth you bring you are my king Amen/
He trys not to sin but you don't know what it's like/
when theres no way to win cause your ass can't even fight/
growing up in condition like this we know it ain't right/
and we can't do shit for em so they lead with there own light/
its just another murder gang killings ain't nothing new/
probably shot him cause he sportin in red, they only sport light blue/
you believe all the shit the ghetto goes through/
yet lives day 2 day life like this is how they do/
y'all act like i ain't got nothing to say how can this be?/
I've been trained in the way of the unstoppable MC/
when you listen to twist, mos, Nas, and kweli/
that teach society with elevated mind and vocabulary/
MC like these be killing em and thrilling em still/
plz recognize open your ears not your eyes and you'll find that i'm ill/

-Verse-

Nice verse Verse. lol. I was feelin it altho I doubt your from the hood. Your prolly some whiteboy at a religious school. haha I'm jus playin. I like the lyrics. Good structure and flow. Try flowin about your life style, instead of a gangstas all the time. I think it would be deeper. No hate, jus an opinion. Peace

yo tag got a good point this was real good work you utilized all your elements well in unison.stay up and do your thing

yea dawg i was feelin your verse.. nice creativity and imagry.. keep up the good work..8/10

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But yeah i agree this was a good piece....it made a good read i thought...Your structure was pretty good in this, a few lines were a little long but nothing big.....vocab in this was good i thought as well...flow was pretty nice....overall this was a pretty good piece..keep at it.