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Supreme Da Ghost,is da realist//
only smoke on da greenist// no sticks//mad crystlas//an seedless// i flip bricks//pac pistols//belive it// i am so hot man//god damn//head straight to tha top fam// still be on da block//duckin cops//wit da rock an soft grams// an if shit get poppin//i got da glock in da trash-can// round here u stop watchin//u'll prolly get knocked man// come to da block// tryin to cop//u'll prolly get robbed man// J-BLOCK//representin wit all my heart fam// many of u so called mc's//aint even gott it// ur vocals is empty//cant even stic to a topic// dog it aint meant to be//I wish u would stop it// rappin like u hard//but wont step to me// off the Beat// 5.0 desert eagle'll sweep ya off'a ur feet// i hear yall niggaz talkin but ya aint about nuffin// iam da nigga dat'll let da bulldog start barkin// wit back-down playin in my walk-man// hollow-tips'll blow ur back-out// u'll only need a childs casket// ur another pussy in da back-round//l ike Black-Child// runnin behind faggots//Da Ghost nigga what?// got sigs-calicos-glock semi-automatics// never scared to let'em go// Supreme Da Ghost gettin focused masterin tha flow// -Supreme Da Ghost- Last edited by Supreme Da Ghost : 11-23-03 at 05:56 PM. |
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it was ok work on rhyming more and havin better punches
and ya structure need work |
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you need work but you aint garbage...
it would be better as an audio |
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You need to leave 3 names or 3 links of people that you left feedback on or this will get deleted..
But this was alright...like said above me your structure needs work, you should try to make the lines around the same length and add some internals and multies to help the flow out, it was a bit off at points...vocab was ok, could be up'd though...but overall this was a alright piece, keep at it and keep dropping. |
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