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Old 11-29-03, 04:23 PM   #1
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Nok Vision
Mental god
Deva

Perseverance of limited actions combining to institutional priorities
The experience gifted subtraction providing to kill the fake majority
Factors enhancing the molecular compounds of amune gases
Procters chances freeze unidentified results into the masses
Thus proceeding to evaperate the carbon cycle of'a curcamstance
Us bleeding yet to inticipate starvon pulses for the certain chance
What i'm trying to declare is false statements that are regardless
You want me..come get me..don't startle my peers thats heartless

My body temperature rises with the energy from the street..why
I Cry Because the only destiny you have to accomplish is to die
The agents on the street passing the drugs eyen me down
Wanten to slit me from ear to ear tryin to steal my crown
For a little moment of popularity accumilating to starvation
Core in the centre majority is I judging typically to humiliation
Riddles beyond my control known as rumours grow rappidly
But your growing like a unhealed tumour proceeding unsafely
...want me...come and get me..

Don't try to conceal the air I breath nore torture my family
With gun shots at my home strikin my sisters destiny
Gang related dealin habits that started as a game really
Now it's more of a factery job police hide from this reality
Thinken it's false mentality and theres a forest-field around
9-1-1 is dialed but there isn't even a siren to reveal sound
Do you people relate to congrigations of the daily night-mare
When the guy that wants you aims oppisite for war declared
...if you want...hit me...not him or her...

I'm disguested emoitionaly torn from scars being rusted
Broken angel wings from thoughts of who can be trusted
kill me if i'm leaving you with a problem from a state of mind
Why bring others thats suicide a knife and wriste combined
Souls suppose tobe free it isn't a human been yet it's trapped
Fools killed the rose growing from concrete left inacent clapped
Indescreet priorities if you block an inacents natural destiny
Incomplete life spand you destroyed when ya problem was wit me

...it doesnt make sence..so why create suspence..
...when you kill another..oppisite of your openate
...speak dont stutter..take this knowledge and own it...
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Old 11-29-03, 04:47 PM   #2
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yo wus up rule. this was a good piece, flow was good.
i liked the concept, vocab=nice, you had some good multis to, i give this an 8/10.
GOOD PIECE MY NIGGA, KEEP DOIN YOUR THING, PEACE.
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So fuck with us and i'll have WORD aim FAT BOY 2 at you and your whole set/- S.S.
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Old 11-29-03, 04:51 PM   #3
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hot peice twin you did this right...
your graphic nature is exposed by your passion in writting and i must admit you excell in subject peaces more then misellanious battle format....do go commercial and you will be dope.
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Old 11-29-03, 06:28 PM   #4
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uppen for some critques
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Old 11-29-03, 08:29 PM   #5
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this peice seemed good for what it was...although there were lines that to me just didnt make sense...the entire first stanza seemed like a collection of big words and adjectives...canibus style...but as the peice went on it got better i guess...keep droppin

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Old 11-29-03, 08:55 PM   #6
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your illiterate....those were simple everyday words that people hear from teachers and shit and some words i've learned from reading...but yeah uppen
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Old 11-29-03, 08:57 PM   #7
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YO RULE CLEAR YOUR PMS, I TRIED TO PM YOU AND IT SAID UR BOX WAS FULL.

CHECK THIS OUT AND DROP SOME FEEDBACK THX PEACE
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...6826#post946826
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Old 11-29-03, 09:18 PM   #8
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yeah man nice drop............it all made perfect sense....lol.....expansive vocab.......good flow though thought it fell a little weak in places....but on the whole....tight shit.....pZ...
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Old 11-29-03, 09:35 PM   #9
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flowed throughout

structured well

vocab was good

nice wordplay and complexity

overall this was a good peice
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Old 11-29-03, 10:42 PM   #10
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Yo, what ya think about doing a collab?

Check this out then tell me if you're down:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=93392
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Old 11-29-03, 11:02 PM   #11
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yeah i'm down man...i sent you a message...uppen for some feedback pz
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Old 11-30-03, 04:00 PM   #12
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Old 11-30-03, 09:30 PM   #13
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Old 12-01-03, 03:02 PM   #14
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