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12-01-03, 09:59 AM
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freestyle
IP: B6F0 7B9E
 see a red beam blast your hoel team /and have all drop on they nees/asking for peace but the only peace you getin is the peace to your cheek/have you on street licing from your head to your feet /next to your peips /and i can tell you week the type to cry in a cell just for getin bagged for weed/the badiest is me |
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12-01-03, 10:06 AM
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IP: 919D A815
This was um.. wack.. Trying using some better vocab, some more complex rhymes, maybe also actually have a hint of meaning behind your lines, and make them longer, < thats just the amount for you not to be classed as the biggest herb ever..
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12-01-03, 10:35 AM
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Re: freestyle
IP: 54F1 AB26
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 you need to elevate dawg |
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12-01-03, 10:56 AM
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IP: 6F9E F23B
I no im new and i dont mean to give orders but.................... put ur lyrics into lines instead of one thing after another....................................... Peace!
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12-01-03, 11:43 AM
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IP: F325 E5EE
work on ya flow dawg.. use vocab,complexity,creativity, imagry..
overall you need to elvate dawg.. check my open mic's http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95506 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95629 |
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12-01-03, 11:49 AM
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IP: E2F1 1486
too short , develop it a little more n use more varied vocab
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12-01-03, 05:16 PM
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IP: A9A7 727D
you have to reply to three other open mics, and post links to your replies in this thread, or it gets deleted.
thanks.
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12-01-03, 05:39 PM
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IP: D85C 59A5
this isn't a freestyle forum dog go somewhere else I think you have skill so go ahead use ur head and do some type of structure and a better more complex rhyme scheme. pz and luv
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