This is my first drop sence i got with Soft Focus...so here i go tryn'a rep tha crew....

People arund me have my capabilities tied in'a strict noose
Trying to hold me back but i'm capable of breaking loose
Thoughts flowing through my mind like a river of failure
I'll ride that stormy wave break obstacles be a mighty sailer
Your past is behind you let it be don't let it haunt freely
Your present is now your future is your chosen destiny
Pick a path and cross it ride the life long dead dreams
Power there negatives with your postives by any means
Agents are going to scream at your effort call it hopeless
All will be good if you put on your opticles see with focus
Statues are prevailed to show respect for great aspects
Stand strong hard times come struggle for your respects
Persaverance is your choice of goals hopes and dreams
Three wishes an obscene genie grants for what you achieve
Don't realize it yet, may not look at it from that point of view
Take a moment think your the one who gives ya destiny clues
For the trail you lead weather it is safe or fast or worry
Author of'a book is published at birth now write ya story
Things happen for a reason don't stop because of frustration
Keep ya head pac said,he met god but left as an inspiration
Discover your life direction don't give up inspire determination

Critiques would be apreciated...i didn't use much vocab because this piece is ment to try and give inspiration

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

not bad rule

"i didn't use much vocab because this piece is ment to try and give inspiration"

regarding your ending statment yes it is full of inpiratoin
there are alote to refer back to to get that inspiration don't give up npo matteer wat others say or think is wat i got out of this and i guess is the msg you wanna get out to all of us

in two words thank you

peace

good wordplay...it's kinda inspirational...i was mos definitely feelin it.....nice spit.............................................. ............

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Very nice peice

great scheme and awsome flow, no slow spots, i liked your vocab also

nice drop

thanks uppen

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

up up

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

This piece was tight, the rhyme was never off topic, and the flow was tight. I thought there could have been something more added to it, im not quite sure what, but other than that it was tight...keep up the good work....!!

Inspirational it was... nice ass flow, stayed on topic... I didnt think there was anything wrong with anything at all, pure perfection in my eyes.. nice ass drop.. I liked this a lot.

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uppen

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

TIGHTA holy crap am listen to RUNNING during BIIGies part matchs perfetcyly for real!! If some one has da isnteremnetal for dat song u or soem oen should do a rap to dat yo man we should do a collobal

PEACE hit me back at my raps