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It started as a joke to rip into Gazanova/
But now the name Dappa Rappa has been blown all ova/ Peeps have been Quoted as sayin im the hottest shit out/ I hear people jerk off thinkin about my first bout/ Who's first, who wants to be cursed?/ My lyrical content will place people into a hearse/ I'll rip a infectious rhyme into every pore/ And if you still aint down ill rip of your mom's fanny sore/ Ya see im dangerous, sadistic and a momma hustler/ I'll make Charles Manson look like a doggy fiddler/ Blowing my own trumpet is what it seems/ But wouldnt you brag if you had multi-coloured creams?/ Nah that aint me, my spunk is ordinary/ I got so much i can cover everyone at Glastonbury!/ But just taste the spunk i fired all ova ya nanna's chest/ And you'll soon realise ive just committed incest!/ Feedback is appreciated... and go easy! |
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You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback in or this will get deleted...
But this was alright i thought....your structure was pretty decent here, it could be a bit better though i think cause some of your lines are shorter but it happens sometime, you should try for the same length in lines...Your vocab in this was decent i thought as well, could be a bit better though....Your flow was off at points and try adding multies in this to help it out...but overall this was alright....keep at it. |
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