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Old 12-03-03, 01:40 PM   #1
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Mother Taylor's Wedding

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From the moment my mum got her ring i new i was in shit...
A ring from oxfam which looks paculiar, im sure it was made for a clit...
Whats she doin with this guy in the first place?...
This guy is so fuckin ugly you cant identify his race...
Is he white, black or fuckin afghani...
Hell i dont know, he might as well be a tranni...

Now the day of the wedding is upon us and im still in denial...
I gotta now watch my fat ass mum roll down the aisle...
I guess this is it no goin back for my mum...
Her fiance will take advantage of my and cum in my bum...
He wont do it to her, It will be the other way round...
The size of my mums slogg makes me feel hellbound...
Mother Taylor is so dangerous she ripped an ass of a dashhound..
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Old 12-03-03, 01:45 PM   #2
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Sup?

Funny shit! I was feelin: -

"Whats she doin with this guy in the first place?...
This guy is so fuckin ugly you cant identify his race..."

Peace,
Tash Shyne!
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Old 12-03-03, 01:49 PM   #3
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Thanks man appreciate it, kinda new to this shit so im gettin used to it...
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Old 12-03-03, 01:54 PM   #4
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Sup Dappa?

I just noticed your from Manchester. Big up!!!

Check your PM.

Tash Shyne.
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Old 12-03-03, 02:06 PM   #5
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You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback in or this will get deleted...

But this was alright i thought...your structure was pretty good, could use a little work though, try making some of your shorter lines longer to help make the lines the same length....your vocab in this was pretty good i thought, could be up'd a bit though...try adding some multies and internals to this to help out the flow....but overall this was alright...keep at it.
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