In my block,niggaz shootin each other for money
rich kids be laughing but this shit aint funny
I can't even walk down my block,i have to role with a glock
incase a nigga wants to go shot-for-shot
I see kids smoking weed and dope/
Lifes shattered,giving up all hope
everybody's down for the blue and red
it don't matta if you wearin the opposite color you gettin shot in da head
niggaz out to get me,but i aint going out like that
just call me ja rule because i will clap back
i see niggaz who strugglin to eat,but they rollin on bentley's
niggaz suckin uda niggaz dicks,just for that cheese
poor kids with mp3's,crazy thugs and corrupted police
bootleggers and thieves,lord help me please,let me get out in one peice


YA DAWG CRAZY SHIT FO SHO....FEED BACK APPRECIATED


feebacks:
E-LUDE
Rhymes
Koalatee

i liked it . good word play and picture. flow was slightly off in some spots but other than that. good. and this topic is done a lot.but if its what u feel then by all means write it.

fo sho dawg i don't really takl up in open mics so i don't know whats going on...but i'm looking for feed-back

You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback on or this will get deleted...

But yeah this was pretty good...your structure was alright, try to keep your lines around the same lenght though to make it structured good cause you had some shorter lines, but it was still good....your flow in this was good as well i thought, it was off at points like said before me....Vocab in this was pretty decent i though....you had some good wordplay in this....overall this was pretty good...keep at it.

thanx dawg..............ya i'll leave 3 links of who i gave feedback too...........

i liked this sounded like you was talking for real...some ok voacb and not a bad was to structure the piece..all in all not bad.....jus keep at it man......pZ...nice

thanx for the support and feedback...i appreciate this

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yo this crazy...nice flow you got its kool how you got the every little detail in...i mostly liked the ending was great...


peace

thanx for the feeback dawg appreciate it..........good lookin yall!!!!...

Dope........ Im Feelin' The Realness U Came With.... Nigga Went Str8 To The Point & Had A Nice Flow.... Holla At Me For A Collab or Suttin' Mayne........ 1.......

aiight dawg i will fo sho...i'll holla at ya wen i see u online...shit i'll be on this all night!