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Old 12-05-03, 08:25 PM   #1
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A Poem To Her Mother

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I dropped this one before for a friend who wrote this for her mother.

Holding this crumpled picture between my two thumbs, seeing your beautiful smile, your white lace gloves.

Picture Perfect Memory.

Fifteen years later, and things aren't so great, a reflection in the mirror flows great tears of hate.

Sheer unhappiness with what you've become, blaming your children for what you have done.

Angry words I HATE YOU only add to the madness, Friday night, 11:30, and I don't know where my dad is.

Jump into my sea of tears, open your mouth and drink in my fears.

Act like a mother, for once, I beg you, eat something please, I wish I could save you.

You're wasting away, but please let me eat, don't make me suffer for your self-defeat.

I miss that smile, the one from the photo, I no longer have that angel to go to.

I ripped up your picture in a fit of rage, my precious keepsake of you crumbling from age.

We may have grown apart from pain and misery, but I swear that you will always be beautiful... if not to others, at least to me.

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Old 12-05-03, 08:32 PM   #2
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wow, thast amazing

i could really feel the emotion and had great imagry..

tell your friends, marvelous job
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Old 12-05-03, 11:21 PM   #3
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nigga you laugh at life but life is my biggest fear i wana die each day of every year death is 1 thing i look forward to my life sux i dont know about you i got fucked up by my own crew now i brewin up a new stew
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Old 12-05-03, 11:29 PM   #4
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umm...
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Old 12-08-03, 12:24 AM   #5
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this was amazing i injoyed every line evey word...

i felt wat the carecter felt as i was reading this

its a a bit hard to read without almost shedding a tear

great stuff

peace
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Old 12-08-03, 02:35 PM   #6
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good poem, it was really good

topic, to your mom, was good

good imagery, vocab and structure

keep postin up man, not newbie-ish at all

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