who you know poppin this shit droppin tha clipz
mother fuckaz just hop in tha crib u know we droppin tha kid
laced the nigga like we boxin tha kid
dont make take a ox to your ribs
and have you runnin around leakin
with me sneakin with your cutie freakin
cuz when i see your bitch ass, boobie peekin
so we started speakin
told her i'll come over for tha week end
and you know i was bone'n tha slut
her toungue all on my nutz
with my dick in her guts
deepthraot to my lungs and she swallow'd a nut
any chicken head wanna holla whad up
just follow tha truck

....to be continued

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This was alright.....structure could use a bit of a touch up though, but you can fix that...just make the lines around the same length instead of having different lengths cause it throws the flow off sometimes...add some internals to this to help the flow....keep at it.

its aight

fix the structure and its cool

kinda simple rhyme scheme too

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u are prety good and these are battle ryms work on your rap ryms

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pretty nice just work on your structure... atleast you know how to spit multis tho, most people in this Open Mic section don't.. Good drop tho mayne.

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that was raw ryming scheme is good it all fitted together well and each line wasnt to long or short


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