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Old 12-07-03, 07:46 PM   #1
LoCo
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Nuclear Concepts Presents: LoCo

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Repped:
Ace Of Spades
SOUTHERN RIPPA
Withersman


Lethergical flow- snapin necks
Ohh rip shit up, pamflet of asses kicked
Cant compare, any other MC's futile up against me
Obiously aint an ordrinary G
yea,im that crazy nigga wit a sawed off in his pocket
wen u say u gon jump me, i cut my optic to show u it dont phase me
shit im lazy, so i dont clean up the murder scene
phene for death takin, awakin this beast and get a herbet hoover in ur back
i dont lack hate, i just add fate multiply then devide and pull-it
releasin a lead bull-it, into ur forhead
whats that equal? a sequal when i ride on my enemys till they dead
went to church to get sins forgiven, priest slaped me
i snaped b, now im driven to kill any inner friend or foe
bought a prostitue sold her on the black market
fark-it, thats not even a word, this is absurd
this cat using fake shit, talkin fake spit, walkin on fake tits
im full of it... till u get murdered u cant deny-it
im shy like dre bly, untill im drunk, then i've sunk
and i leave u dead for weeks then call an ambulence so it smells and they got trouble gettin the body
i got 2 d.n.a's a twin, but i killed him now i win...
ive lost it, whipin out races like the holcacaust-shit
i got 7 diffrent level's.
1. is me n the devil rollin together
livin forever, till i see somebody i jump out the casket
pull out my gas, blast-it, gettin ur ass-kicked
by this fantastic nigga, wit an oz of dro in his mind
chemical cunbustion, frustration released
and makin u see black till u see red n blue lights
then u kno u lost the fights, and its over...
peace
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Old 12-07-03, 08:11 PM   #2
Menik
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This was alright i thought....your sturcture could use some work though...your lines are all different lengths, short and long, try to keep them around the same length so its structured good and it helps the flow out as well...flow in this was ok..could have added some more multies and internals to help it out though...but this was alright..keep at it.
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