Im an insane fuck , you fuck with me your outta luck/
heres a dick you can suck, your a hilbilly w/ a truck/
My rymes and lines are murderous crimes, im perfect your blind/
My rymes are cool in old and new times, no needa be kind/
in this ryme ive defined, the fate of my life,pain and strife/
niggas stabbin me w/ a knife, fucked up griff , /
like nigga wreckin a train, like I said im insane/
Ill hang ya w/ a crane, Im not right in da brain/
Bitch Ill shoot you w/ my glock,bitch suck my cock/
heres a key go find a door to lock, your ignored and blocked/
lisen I be freestylin till the day I die, you bitch ass fuck start to cry/
you need apply, suck yo own dick or try, faget you fuck die my oh my/
This is the last ryme im drop on yo ass, just remember when you hear a blast/
Im common at you fast, youll get harrassed, youll fuckin get trashed/





yo w/ mean with . and that was to no body!

You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get deleted..

But this was ok.....structure is improving, just watch the line length on some of the lines though, they were kinda stretched out there...try adding some multies to this to help the flow and make it better...but overall this was a alright....keep at it.

it was pretty good dude, the flow was there and you had the right structure to a point but some of yur lines were predictable and you repeated your self a few times but other than that it was alright.

Holla at em.

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