Winter
A dark silent walk home I glance to see the beautiful trees glow
Remarkable the vision after the storm laid a blanket of snow
Trapped in this peace of mind of the soft focus of the evils illusion
Sparkling drops of snow easing my mind putting rest to confusion
It's contagious I could stare at the mysterious eye candy all night
An never feel I’ve had enough, It helps my ego..believe I’m alright
Who would have thought just a walk could be a helpful therapist
Take away the evil stop you from going and slitting your wrist
Eyes feel focused staring at how the ecosystem actually works
The winter is so precious maybe it's because of Jesus’ birth

Spring
The year is changing like the baby who was born in December
Gods crying rain to wash up snow another season to remember
Paralyzing hate with waterfall of lust that begins to prove love
You sit and hear the angels play with the thunder from above
Puddles left in the ground from the rain storm...nights perfection
You stare in the dew of the damp leaves to see your reflection
Imperishable the items on the trees that begin to slowly sprout
The lakes begin to flow hard and you see fishermen netting trout
This season is another blessing in disguise from powerful angels
We pray to the keeper of earth to show we're forever thankful

Summer
Infatuated by the power from the sun and the bliss handed
Down in rays letting flowers bloom an migrated birds be landed
Animals awake from hibernation morning you hear birds chirping
Look out side at the surroundings and see every things working
From the smallest insect to the largest bear summers majestic
With a symphony of sounds in the morning leaving us going hectic
Wake up a little early so you see the sun go down feel the sunset
Open yours eye like flowers see summer is beautiful...no regrets
Heating up the water so our race can swim and enjoy pleasure
Another season change that was opened up golden treasure

Fall
The temperature starts to fall similar to the leaves on the trees
See the animals packing up an birds getting ready to be diseased
Flowers being drowned in rain rivers start to have a light ice
A sheet so thin but sets the mood just right an for know price
Covered in leaves and mud from a little river on your property
You can tell the seasons taken to you by the rain fallen promptly
Trust this season will come back with more stormy weather
Rain drenching ya close fog staling your journy..anything better?
This is special in its own little way everything is a young waterfall
Maybe this is actually why they declare this fallen season...fall

The Art
Seasons can't cure the blind but they help them feel there way
Give a right purpose similar to thoughts on why Christians pray
Showing different pictures from rivers to snow on the trees
Incredible it's so blissful could take away the air you breath
Take a glance around you and feel the mystical painting it draws
Deserves an applause for many ways it leaves your eyes in awes
Doesn't use a paint brush a pad it simply uses it's surroundings
Tangles vines around trees leaving certain remarkable findings
This is the portrait of life a daily picture that'll never depart
Helps your insight rain snow fog mist all a beautiful art

This was edited for my spelling mistakes by filed....thanks that was apreciated

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Quite sweeping...

...the detail of imagery was resounding.

Some questions though. What does 'birds get ready to be diseased' mean? I never heard that before you see. That birds get diseased. Or even get ready to be diseased. Though it could mean 'deceased', but even then, i never heard of that before.

Drownded? Okay, i'm being pedantic now.

I liked this piece. The subject matter and how you brought it to the surface in such a way. Cos i too like the poetry and overall art of the seasons. Such wide ranging metaphors lying both open and hidden..

....resp...

yeah man thanks for fixing my speling mistake...i didnt know how to spell deceased so i just went with what sounded close, but i mean like they go away for the winter a lot of them..i was just trying something different, thanks for the feed back though thats apreciated

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Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
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rule well that says it all u rule poetry dat was hot everything about it it needs no work

is it legendary...or does it still need work?

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
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i had to read this twice, for the fear that i might have missed something. I didnt want to miss any hidden message, or any clear layed out one, because it was so nicely written. Your detail and way of putting your thoughts about each season into this piece was amazing! if i had been blind and some one read this to me, i think i would be pretty upset that i couldnt see the wonders you described. The seasons are something that ppl seem to over look, and not think to much about it. But after reading this piece im pretty sure im going to be taking in to notice the weather and seasons more often. and lol before you can make this legendary, try re-reading it, theres some small spelling mistakes. this was a NICE READ!!!

~Tera~
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dat shit was hot
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yeah i cant spell...lol....any body sees spelling mistakes tell me where and the right way to spell it so i can fix it

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Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
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By far the best sensory poem ive ever read. described the surroundings beautifully. great vocab. never got outa rhyme scheme. close to perfection, i give it a 9.9/10 almost perfect, and in this world that means alot. great work and keep showin everyone ure talent.

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thanks uppen

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uppen for more replies

there is not 3 links in this because this was up before that rule was put into force. If I need them tell me and I will place them in here as soon as possible.

Peace

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all i really can say about this is DAAAAMMN that was the best thing i have ever read from you..and you chose a topic to write on that was so unusual atleast for me ive never seen anyone be able to take suttin as simple as seasons it bring it to life like this piece IM IN AWE ur amazing yea after ya mistakes i truly think this will be legendary i just hope it gets the notice it deserves GREAT JOB MAN...god ur amzing..

my fav bar was this..
"Seasons can't cure the blind but they help them feel there way
Give a right purpose similar to thoughts on why Christians pray"

im just attached to that because its so true so real speaking on faith and i hold christian beliefs so i appreciate that all in the same

great job..only thing is spelling and lata ill point the words out for ya..... MUCH RESPECT...i would tell ya to keep elevating but after reading that, shyiit i think u already reached the top..but keep it up..

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thanks a lot...and the spelling was all fixed 'filed' from my soft focus crew fixed it for me on wordperfect or something

if ye like it that much nominate it in the legends lol

peace an thanks for the replies

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Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461