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12-15-03, 01:56 AM
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[.OnE.] ft. Whitelightning
IP: FDD6 AE15
Whitelightning
One Feeling, Many Emotions Derived How Can One Being Make Me So Alive Guts Wrenching At Any Single Glance Motions Ceaseing, We Start To Dance To Co-Exsist Is Unexpected Bliss Don't Want My Oppurtunity, Considered Missed Take Advantage Of Anything Wholesome Don't Wanna Spend Times All Lonesome If Elements Stray What Scars Remain Do All Feelings Leave A Permenant Stain Too Many Bones Locked Up Without Keys Airborne Hatred Thick, An Uncontrollable Disease Experiences Affect All Biased Opinions And Feelings The Next Woman Will Be Subjectd To These Raw Dealings One Woman, Singular Soul Ripped Or Sewn Too Bad This One, I didn't Condone ..Sureal.. Love, One Thing, Death Is Another.. Pull One String, Flip To The Other.. Breathless, Her Beauty Enthralls.. My Heart Felt, All Over The Walls.. Torn Out, Thrown At The Mirror.. Burned Out, Drone Of The Fear.. Divide Two, Then Split It In Half.. Beside You, World Starts To Crack.. Glass Shards, Scattered In Front.. Fresh Scars, Objects Are Blunt.. The Blood Drips, Sin Bares Heavy.. Flipped Scripts, I Am Now Ready.. Knife To Throat, Blade To Her Skin.. Life, It Floats, But Wheres It Been.. Held My Hand, Cried Ever So Gently.. Nothing Planned, Not Done Intently.. Slid The Blade, She Gasped For Air.. Her Life To Fade, From Internal Fear. How Many Reasons, She Have To Live.. How Much Blood, Did She Have To Give.. Everlasting Stream, Of Blood Begun.. In The End, There Can Only Be One.. Last edited by Sureal : 12-15-03 at 06:26 PM. |
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12-15-03, 02:02 AM
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IP: 20FB 45AB
nice work guys
both of you did very well...you both managed to shine working together WL fav line: Too Many Bones Locked Up Without Keys Airborne Hatred Thick, An Uncontrollable Disease sureal fav line: Love, One Thing, Death Is Another.. Pull One String, Flip To The Other.. good write fellas...imagery metaphors all were there drop some feed on my open mic in sig titled : untangible evil |
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12-15-03, 02:11 AM
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IP: F354 9C29
Man.. Everything I've ever read of Sureal's has been good, Now i'm a fan of whitelightning too
I loved this piece, both spit with emotion, This had everything.. Great write you 2..
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12-15-03, 02:43 AM
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Word.
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IP: 340D 8B8F
But yeah i agree this was a good collab here....enjoyed both parts of this, made a real good read...liked the multies used in both verses, vocab from both of you was real nice....flow was good in both verses as well....overall i thought this was a good collab.
Last edited by Credz : 12-15-03 at 02:52 AM. |
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12-15-03, 02:50 AM
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IP: FDD6 AE15
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12-15-03, 01:47 PM
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De M-O-D Bruk
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IP: 3B20 6C52
uppin
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It's Gunna Be Some Stuff You Gon' See, That's Gunna Make It Hard To Smile In Da Future...
-Pac Shakur Acro Nim The Initial,Period I Speak Out Battles Pink Slips 007 Pt. 2 Fuck Bruklor aka Self.
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12-16-03, 01:12 AM
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De M-O-D Bruk
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IP: FDD6 AE15
maybe Sureal was right..this site is goin downhill with zero feedback..
uppin.
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It's Gunna Be Some Stuff You Gon' See, That's Gunna Make It Hard To Smile In Da Future...
-Pac Shakur Acro Nim The Initial,Period I Speak Out Battles Pink Slips 007 Pt. 2 Fuck Bruklor aka Self.
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12-16-03, 10:52 AM
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IP: FF89 3C60
Uh...
Real good formats... Real good flow, decent vocab, great imagery. But what the hell was this about? The birth of a serial killer? A passion killing to someone you once loved? Not dissing it, I must have just missed the reasoning behind the killing. Overall, 7.75/10 Woulda given higher, this was really dope... But it left me going, "huh?" Peace
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12-16-03, 01:21 PM
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De M-O-D Bruk
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IP: 3B20 6C52
uppin...
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It's Gunna Be Some Stuff You Gon' See, That's Gunna Make It Hard To Smile In Da Future...
-Pac Shakur Acro Nim The Initial,Period I Speak Out Battles Pink Slips 007 Pt. 2 Fuck Bruklor aka Self.
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12-16-03, 01:31 PM
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Fuck You, I Rhyme Better
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IP: 10E3 83F7
WL...i hoped you learned alot from this collab
your flow was good but if you could drop a syllabul here or there it would be better...the last few lines really were out there in Syll. count... Sureal... Yup, as usual... great |
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12-16-03, 01:43 PM
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one wink
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IP: B691 B3C4
To be honest.
You two are like carbon copies of each other. Your styles are...like, based on Multi's...which...eh |
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12-16-03, 02:35 PM
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De M-O-D Bruk
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IP: 3B20 6C52
uppin..yea I know what ur talkin about Realist...
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It's Gunna Be Some Stuff You Gon' See, That's Gunna Make It Hard To Smile In Da Future...
-Pac Shakur Acro Nim The Initial,Period I Speak Out Battles Pink Slips 007 Pt. 2 Fuck Bruklor aka Self.
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12-16-03, 02:55 PM
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Banned: Permanent
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IP: 3A1D AC66
Dope.
. . . . WL.. your deff improvin kid.. good shit.. it was actually almost borderlined with sureals.. ALMOST.. you had a good outlook n' it was a good read. nice Sureal.. Rep Ro Sent.. this was dope.. simple n' to the point, not fuckin around.. always deep.. always a good read nothing really i could tell either of you to work on.. but.. . . Hit This Up http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...?threadid=98583 |
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12-16-03, 07:10 PM
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IP: FDD6 AE15
is this the same surreal as the one on Thugs Mansion??and is WhiteLightning D*Wrecks or D*rex?????? or is this jus a coinsidence?
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12-16-03, 07:18 PM
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IP: A1D0 A113
Sureal this is The First Time I have read One Of ya Pieces but now i will look out For them ya structure was Nice and ya Flow was Excellent But i think ya Lines are A bit to short but it Don't Worry Me.....WL Your Verse was Good too ya Structure was Ok ya Flow was Excellent Ya Did Well TO Start it Off And I Enjoyed the Imagery...........
so that was the Best O/m i havre read and and Hella Tight Collab ya'll and i'll look out for more of ya Work.......p.€.a.c.€....... |
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