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fuck ma parents
IP: 2614 26EA
i do drugs cuz parents apparently replaced tha hugz for hitz
get shit when i come home dad sittin drunk readin the holy korone moms bitchin wishin i was neva concieved so she mistreats me with more than i need; fuckin swingin at me so i put her down then headed for the drunk ass, ass clown; this is for all the shit you put me through callin ya only kid a schitz claimin me to be bipolar so fuck you stride over and come watch me kill your bitch dont leave cuz next im commin after your shit cunt with in one hand a phillipes screw and tha otha mcgivers gun the wrath of thee and three othas baby boys from psyco mothas i got the world ridin me on this one so your fuckin screwed i deminished the lies; on my own i unscrambled the truths unscrambled the reasons for u makin me believe then i was a fuck up yo struck out; now no time to suck up that doubt im not as worthless as yo believe ya didnt give me room room to progress ~n~ succeed just put this slacker out out on these fuckin streetz to try makin it on my own to poor to afford food from tha local grocery store so what makes you think i got a phone and even if i did ya so called schitz son wouldnt call yo can shit on ya self cuz while i make it your ignorant ass can crash and fall couldnt put // cuz it kept erasing ma shit i tried to elevate but i dont think i succeeded hit this up rayman g worth .::$izzle::. |
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IP: 2C59 BA79
yo, i like this shit cuz you are commin real with it. This flow sounds deep like, colombine deep.
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Word.
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IP: 63D7 39EF
Yeah this was ok....your structure was alright, it could use some work thought, cause some of your lines were kinda stretched out there at some spots, Try keeping your lines around the same length to help the flow out...also try adding some multies...but keep at it.
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IP: 4577 CD9A
..^^>>I agree with ^..your flow was nice...keep up..
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IP: 4550 84E0
Hell Yeah J(This is Ian)Fuck both our worthless excuse of parents
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IP: A1D0 A113
Yea I Enjoyed it but Ya Structure Need Work And Ya Flow was alright..........Ya Vocab and Ya Wordplay Kinder Worked Up A picture in My Head....The Topic was alright But Ya mainly need to Elevate a bit man .....p.€.a.c.€.....
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IP: 7EE3 6327
much appreciation fo the feed
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IP: 7EE3 6327
Justin...you wanna battle tomorro durin first block?
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IP: 7EE3 6327
iight
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