Shattered happiness, shards of tranquility...
It's only business, human mortality.
Dealer of death, hated by society...
And using that hate, ta gain notoriety.
So sit beside me, hear this confession...
Absorb the lesson, mental window dressin.
Heart's deadened, so tales are terminal...
Subconscious needs soothing, daily Demerol.
Infant or adolescent, mature or decrepit...
Age is irrelevant, intentional accidents.
Eventual malcontent, karma pays dividends...
So I'll end up hell-bent, but not for Heaven.
Soul's leadened, destined to submerge...
But there's no turning back, I can't fight tha urge.


$izzle
~.Nise.~
Sureal

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yeah i thought the style was good, but it didnt seem to flow as good...maybe cos the bar length...i think it would maybe read better in paragraph....but think the vocab helped it keep going....but yeah it was decent enough.......pZ....

it was nice

Uppin...

Will you people peep this shit here...

Yeah, right here.

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...New style works...I liked...Keep up...^^

^Kuz That was Some Weak Feedback
Yea Ya New style works man ya structure worked With Ya Flow And Made It all the More Betta.....I think ya could do it Longer But it was still good...Ya Vocab Was Good and ya WordPlay Was Nice Too..This was a Nice Keystyle Kuz......p€ac€.........