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Old 12-23-03, 09:34 AM   #1
Cold Blooded
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Tell me whats wrong with my verse and help me elevate

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This is just a quick verse I wrote.

I'm abouta "drop" this flow
Like Lil' Jon gets "low"
Once again I'm abouta spit
Like my name was Corey Miller I'm killin' shit
How many niggas must I prove wrong
Niggas act hard but they wearin' thongs
I thought you was a G
But I was wrong I see
You got bark but no bite
They say you cant even fight
Now I know why you talk so much shit
You try to mask the fact that your really a bitch
Your like a animal usin' camoflaouge you aint it
But if I go down I'm goin' down swingin'
And I got more things to talk about then bling blingin'
When I spit these rhymes I'm spittin' the truth
This aint for the fame this is jus' for you
Dont get me wrong I want the fame
But thats not why I'm tryin' to get in the game
I'm trying to elevate so I can make a change
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