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First verse of a new thing i'm workin' on. Wanted to see if you guys thought it was worth finishing.



i remember the attack of establishment upon reflection
the wrath of the fascist joint chiefs of staff infection
reflections of the way life used to be like China Beach
amphetamine and acetylene released defile the streets
reciting silent sonnets for rocket silos gone atomic
swore allegiance to the sword a month before we fell upon it
the capitalist version of catalysts verses propaganda
apocalyptic miasma for the masses covert memoranda
a requiem for fallin stars with scars below the waistband
invisible tribes with knives for eyes control the wasteland
summer seeds of fire return to burn the winter harvest
adam’s descendents feign repentance then invade the garden


make a patsy take him out
Camelot is burning down
no one knows just who they are
phantoms throw a coup-de-tat


theoretical conspiracies political mysteries & scandals
divinity said stick your enemies head on the mantle
therapeutic candles mask the corpse redolences in Dallas
rifle media reports scandals while usurper's take the palace
thru the looking glasses Alice a generation etched in acid
third eyes pride open wide spy the procession of his casket
traffic signals for blasted missiles better safe than sorry
cataclysms become romaticisms like the dance of Mata Hari
so you decorate the coffin paint the walls in fallout shelters
you say you want a revolution yet you pray for helter skelter
cerebral matter still stains the back of Jackie's pink jacket
a tragic example of power's plan to seek peace and attack it

make a patsy take him out
Camelot is burning down
no one knows just who they are
phantoms throw a coup-de-tat

there's a heaven for seeds where the abdomen bleeds
fuckers battle for feed and death shakes her rattle for these
satyrical themes of world piece of mind your manners please
and thank you for the draft cuz I can't imagine lives mattering
How bout a deep thought we can sleep soft with old Lee caught
now he be gone Jack Ruby got a sweet spot in the parking lot
mystery solved case shut justice serviced served its purpose
the master of rings spills the nitroglycerine to burn the circus
we clowns suffer depression purge the nation with hysterics
on the interior we cryin' a river external we grin and bear it
smiles superimposed holding our weapon in the photograph
40 years and still we fear the passing of assassin's aftermath


You might not get the flow but it works out when spoken. So i'd rather comments on the wordplay and the content than structure, but whatever you wanna say is fine.

Edited: FInished it.