Both good verses all i gotta say to em' is jus keep it up, an elevatin peeps.

pacaso mac
you definatley need to fix the structure, an try to even your lines out a bit more.
you had some nice concepts, but your rap was about guns, this is the net, you have to spit in metaphors really.
your vocab was pretty newbish.

BFK
your wordplay was pertty good, an you never used much really bad vocabulary. you structure still needs a little work though.

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