This is my first open mic post, gimme some honest feedback please.....

Internal Struggle
(The optimist Vs. The pessamist)

Negative Influence

I'm gonna show you the image, the illusion im usin,
im winnin the game but inside im just losin,
the confusion causes more than frustration,
its bottled up rage inside an average caucasion,
a misplaced stage in my battle for greatness,
wish i could take time and space, hold it & shape it,
mold it and make it, fine-tuned to my designs,
but instead i dread of watching my demise,
what i decide could ultimately shape my life,
emotions collide but my heart's as cold as ice,
I'm smart and willing and I know what's right,
but my negativity nags and haunts me every night,
my creativity lags and taunts me far from sight,
it's outta my reach, just beyond my grasp
its like swallowing glass to stay in middle-class,
while some dumb fuck gets a million in cash,
but that's life, and that's how it goes,
goes to show life is a never ending road,
one that i dont have to traverse alone,
get depressed, stayin home in the shadows,
in dark parts of my mind glow like a thousand candles,
they burn bright and i conjour up visions,
my mind is just a prison for my optimism,
fate handed me a key, freedom im given,
it appears to me....... my positivity's risen


A battle inside, between two sides of the mind,
hopeless to try the strongest side will survive,
the more you rely and the more you decide,
the more you warp destiny and two worlds collide,

Positive Influence

I feel unstoppable there's something new surging,
ambition and talent seem to finally start merging,
i'm receiving the solutions to all of my searchin,
my mind cured for free and nothing i've sold,
just had to struggle for control of my soul,
there's no cure for me, im like the common cold,
but now my goal is just to grow and expand,
i'll make it out with no help and i know i can,
i will show everyone every damn man alive,
i can beat the odds alone, i can survive,
I'm know to thrive take anything you throw at me,
weave words and make webs of pure poetry,
success i believe is something the world's owing me,
I'm unaware of the path but persistence is showin me,
prepared for defeat cause glory comes unknowingly,
my future is what i make it, so it's not yet created,
I wanna keep this feeling...while my negativity's sedated



(I know the topic is kinda played but i just wanted to post an open mic so i wrote one quick)