First off. Congrats to botha yall.
Young, you had a great line length and I found it easy to read an found the rhymes. Great use of vocab, but a lil weak with the punches. I also liked the consistant rhyme for the first 5 lines. But it whent a lil weaker after that.

Will, you had good punches, great 2 line rhyme goin on. lil to large on the lines sometimes but thats alrite. better too much than too lil eh. Structure was good and good use of references "like the wack asian off American Idol being shitty is the only way ull get worldwide".

vote/ Will a peer

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