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Old 04-25-04, 09:51 PM   #11
Oc6 The Caustic
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MCelmersglue- I like your rhymes, but your structure is very sloppy. Try to fix up the structure. Like this kid:
I'm tired of your dirty mouths to keep "whitey" alert//,
the improper speech and those "Dirty South" t-shirts//
I use proper nouns and predicates//
rap about the white house delegates and about if you battle me the hell you'll get//.
You can already tell I'm a threat because I'm precise//
Even though I'm white, poor, and live off of rice//
ETC. ETC.
Do you feel? I like your flow. I say your in if you fix up your structure. Hit us up with another.

Mixxed MC- You have any other flows or battles we can check out.
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