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Old 06-14-04, 01:41 PM   #31
femcee
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femcee's vote: No...Your Whole Structure Was Off, You Had No Guidelines And Not One Punch, You Need To Work On A Few Things Before You Tryout For Any Crew...
-Your Structure...
-Your Punches...
-Your Creativity...

One Of Your Lines Revised By Me:
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OG Line:Yo i'm just sittin blind spittin when i'm rhymin,
Sounds pre-written cos i got da perfect timin,

1st-People Know That When You Spit Its Supose 2 Rhyme, Thats A Given...
2nd-A Prewritten Is Usually Discovered When Its A Long Verse Dropped Early, Not At The Perfect Time...

My Version:
Ive Got More Than Textual Basics When I Transform Your LiPs 2 A LiSp...
...Cuz Your Vrs. Was Like Anal Spit Similiar 2 Shit, But Im Quick To A Fix

So Elevate...........

Vote: I Think You Need 2 Stay Hidden In The Shadows For A While (NO)
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