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Old 06-17-04, 05:15 AM   #1
Emmada59
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aye lookin 4 sum CONSTRUCTIVE feedback...

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yea im pretty new 2 dis, so it aint great, but neway its jst a rant about shit..

every mornin i wake up to tha same//
im sick of fightin n losin in dis game//
for ppl like me dere is nuttin 2 gain, no fame//
the life i live seems 2nd best to dying//
i get knockd down everytime i try flying//
it jst allays feels like im drowing//
e'where i look, i see faces frowning//
no compassion, verbal bashin, cliques clashin//
in such a fashion, this ride of mine is crashin//
i take this knife to my wrist, hope 2 let go tha pain//
why is it like this?? its fuckin insane//
i hope to join the Lord in his reign//
yet through the sorrow i persevere//
all i want is sum1 to listen, 2 hear//
which is why i turn to this rap//
i gotta relkease this crapp//
get rid of this dead weight//

ayo looking for feedback pls
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