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07-03-04, 04:16 AM

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C.M.F.S

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Young Dez vs *The~Star*

IP:

WARNING: This vote is not a reflection of how good you are
...but a reflection of how good you were to the other battle

Young Dez-
ok opener... 1st line a little stretched compared to 2nd... 5/10

Quote:

yo star don't play around wit me cuz i got guns dat pop like pringles/
it will make u lean back like Fat Joe's single

a little more w/p and this bar would have been ok... 4/10

Quote:

battling me u must be insane
I'll snatch away yo life like 50 snatched ja rule's chain

a little personal... needs better structure... 4/10

Quote:

u broke and I hold grands like da Rubba Band man
but nobody know dis cat like da rest of da D12 band

not really doin anything to him... bad punch... 3/10

Quote:

on the mic I 'll dismantle dis man like P.Diddy did Da Band
and da gun will put u to an early sleep like its da Sandman

2nd line a little stretched compared to 1st startin to slack off in punch... 3/10

Quote:

I don't even wanna battle dis chump
he gay he the type of guy who rolls around wit high heels and pumps

ok closer but stretched 2nd... 4/10

Quote:

I'll kill u and battling u tipsy
cuz u fuckin wit Young Dez da Prince of da City

*The-Star*-
some ok vocab and w/p good opener... 7/10

Quote:

Non-talented, couldn’t think of ya own, your whole spit is based on celebrity names
Non-creative, can’t be original you’ll never have fame in the battling game

ok r/s alrite flow ... 6/10

Quote:

Should get protection for your chest, cuz you wouldn’t wanna get popped
But the way these words are hitting you, you just automatically drop

good r/s good flow a bit of punch...7/10

Quote:

The words that you write compare to wind, they just blow by
My words stick in ya head cuz my flow smooth, straight leave ya mouth dry

ok punch needed better w/p on the 2nd... 6/10

Quote:

Could never stop dropping these rhymes, that's why I'm on top of tha grind
Unlike you, you suck, you wouldn’t succeed if ya talent was working in the coal mind

good closer closer 2nd a little stretched... 6/10

Quote:

Scientist drill holes to get to the earth’s core
I’m doing what they doing to ya brain, leaving you eternally lyrically sore

overall- The-Star had a better structure...eg word/play and rhyme/scheme
...the punchlines were ok too

vote- The-Star

peace...

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